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A compelling read by all standards. Though I must admit from your description it made wish you had included a pic of Flower. Good effort.

Wow! This book provides an amazing reading experience. One especially appreciates your excellent command of English. Well done Melvin Dash.

It's different from anything I have read, that's for sure. It is rather face paced and easy to follow with use of simple language.

This is an amazing read. Plus your excellent command of English adds to the pace for an unrivalled reading experience. Well done author.

The storyline presents an interesting take on the relationship between a game and a user. I find it to be fast paced and quite immersive, it's though as you read you as the reader become caught up in the game just like An Jianxin. A very good read I will say.

The storyline has that high powered corporate feel about it that I like. I must compliment you on your excellent command of language which adds to effortless enjoyment of the book. Good job 👍.

One gets a sense of an excellent command of language.That alone coupled with the simplicity of expression for me adds to reading experiensce, giving the book a pace of its own. An outstanding read.

One gets a strong sense of an excellent command of language. There's also a sense of being very fast paced. I 've never come across anything quite like this book. It's different I 'll say.

Well done author you have a great plot. The storyline is fast paced and just draws the reader to want to read on. Nicely done.

Interesting opening to a high school romance flick. Seeing it from the perspective of a teenage girl gives an interesting insight into the feelings on the other side of the gender discourse. The pace is not bad either. I would advise you take time to proof read your work though. Otherwise not a bad job at all.

I read chapter 1 and I have to say the book has this corporate, steel and glass feel that I just love. Apart from a few and I mean a very few grammatical errors which I feel could have been corrected if you bothered to proof read your work, I impressed and looking forward to more catch up with the rest of the story.

Author this is a amazing. A most compelling read. Though personally I would not want to reincarnated as a girl lol! Great plot I must say, very fast pace story that draws the reader to keep going deeper. Save for a few grammatical errors the storyline is perfect and quite compelling. Very nicely done 👍!

Wow! author this is gem of book. I read the first chapter and it just blew me away. I totally got immersed in the storyline which is really one of a kind. It just got me hooked, I 'm looking forward to read more chapters. Great job author.

Much appreciated.

Good plot, great storyline. As always you have a unique plot which entices the reader to want more. However there are some glaring weaknesses that I noted you might want to attend to. In chapter 1 you make reference to a cabin house, which is like over kill. Use of cabin already gives the picture of a wooden or log house. You go on to describe Avita in chapter 2 as, wearing 'some glasses', the use of some in that case is inappropriate. I would suggest you go with, ...'wearing eye glasses or simply glasses. You have a great story which I believe would read even better if you change present tense to past tense, do that you are doing more of narrating. You did a great job of that in, Online Cougar System, and please proof read your work. Otherwise I love the way you are building up the story. The way you ended chapter1 is a quite a cliffhanger. The way you proceed to chapter 2 where we are now seeing Avita years later, brilliant.

Hats to you Adira. You have done a superb job with this offering. Initially the story is low however building up to end chapter 1 on a most interesting cliff hanger. There are some errors that I noted in chapter 1 to do with mixing of tenses right at the onset of the story. Then there was the passage where you wrote, "...she whispered there is someone..." This in the context of someone who lives alone. They would most likely think and not whisper that there is someone in the house. Beyond which I found the build up quite enjoyable especially as it begins to gain in pace. Got job.

The story is as amazing as it is powerful. It is completely immersive and different anything I have read to date with it's clash of magical powers.The plot is just brilliant and the fast pace is addictive making the reader unable to put the book down. Congratulations on coming up with a masterpiece.