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Thank you, I really appreciate it. I'll be checking out that chapter :)

Thank you :)

Great start so far, the story is well written and there's no noticeable grammar issues. Descriptions are thorough, and the author's sense of humor is well received so far. While the two MCs are familiar to what you expect from the genre, they have good chemistry and are well fleshed out.

Thank you 😊

The author's story development and sense of humor are both great, and I also enjoyed the frequent action, but the reason I gave less than 5 stars because there are a lot of grammar issues that distract from the good parts. I think if that is cleaned up a bit the writer's fun style can really shine.

Yes, that sounds about right. I'd just go onto the mobile app and see how the most popular stories have it for example.

Writing this after 5 chapters, the biggest strength so far is the author's thorough and skillful writing. Descriptions are very vivid and pass the test of what I expect from high fantasy. The characters have strong points of view that feel authentic and not like the author is overwriting their own views onto them. My biggest piece of advice to the author is to break up the paragraphs dramatically. I myself had to learn this lesson, so I speak from experience. Many readers are only going to read your story on mobile, so if you open up the app you'll see how large the blocks of text are as presented right now. It's not ruining the story, but I do feel it will stop some people from reading because of what they expect from this site.

I think the biggest strength of this story so far (I have read up until the paid chapters writing this) is the action. The author writes the action well and it feels visceral. The system and level up elements are familiar territory, but serves as a good vehicle for the action. So far the most intriguing story element to me is the MC's status as "Greater human". I am curious to know what might be beyond that. Looking forward to the tournament arc if I'm ever not poor lol