Badges 35
Moments 65
*He Xinlan (He Yuyan should be the sister married to Yang Sen, I think.)
After the death of the Mu couple, Mu Huang and He Yuyan adopted Mu Qingling and chose not to inform her of her true origins. This was because they feared that she would try to claim ownership of the company that her father built. They also asked Mu Huang's influential friends to keep this knowledge a secret from everyone.
The Villain's Wife
Urban · TheBlips
This bomb design makes no sense. In a sealed vessel, an evaporating liquid becomes a gas, increasing the total gas pressure. (Partial pressure of the vapor plus partial pressure of the air prior to evaporation is bigger than the pressure prior to evaporation alone.) It would not create vacuum pressure that would draw the liquid water upwards. It would make more sense if the mana trigger agent were a heavy plug that could be evaporated with mana and cause the water to pour down into a reaction vessel with lightly coated sodium metal spheres (coated to prevent oxidation in air). Any way I could imagine to reduce pressure inside a sealed vessel such that it would suck water up a narrow tube upon a trigger has the natural problem that it would make the water rapidly evaporate under low pressure. Water vapor reacting with sodium in low pressure would not build up hydrogen quickly the same way it would in liquid water, and there is no solution to carry the reacted sodium hydroxide away for more surface reaction. (Water vapor would cause a crust of sodium hydroxide much like an oxide crust forms on sodium metal in air.) And a bomb that must be kept in a particular orientation seems like a bad idea in general, although a mana sensitive plug/separator solves this too. Furthermore, sodium itself doesn’t explode in water. It merely produces aqueous sodium hydroxide and hydrogen gas so quickly that the hydrogen gas escaping solution can be spontaneously combustible in air. No oxygen, no boom. Also, no smoke of any color in this, as the ratio for the hydrogen to spontaneously ignite in air pretty much means complete combustion. It’s a pretty red fireball and then gone, with maybe lingering water droplets but not smoke. For what is purported to be based on regular earth chemistry, my chemist brain is struggling. Drawing a specific analogy to sodium in water kind of implies this game substance has significant similarities that make me confused here about how this bomb is supposed to work. Is there a bomb diagram somewhere that could help me make sense of this multi-chambered sodium-like substance bomb if I’m not understanding it correctly? And sodium is way too soft to be good pointy shrapnel in itself, but I can pretend it’s pointy shrapnel of some other substance embedded with more sodium bits for whatever secondary effects the author is planning. Or at least that watersbane is enough unlike sodium to somehow be both super reactive in water and sufficiently hard to be pointy shrapnel in air even though sodium very much isn’t. Some suspension of disbelief is possible here, but if the analogy is sodium, it needs to either resemble sodium or have the differences explained at least a bit. I don’t need balanced equations and enthalpy calculations to justify bomb yield of a fantasy substance, but some resemblance to real chemistry and physics would be good if the explicit analogy of designing a the magic game bomb is real science.
With the top layer liquid evaporating the air pressure in the bomb would suddenly decrease. Causing the water to be pushed upwards towards the second through a narrow connecting tube and starting the reaction .
MMORPG : Rebirth Of The Strongest Guild Master
Games · Raj_Shah_7152
Well, the gold/cash conversion amount for the house was off by a factor of 10, so I shouldn’t be surprised that math/consistency fails again. I’m trying hard to enjoy this but the math keeps hurting my brain. I wish the editor kept notes to help fix the author’s consistency errors.
Rudra also went to NPC shops and sold everything he did not need anymore to raise money for the upcoming auction . With a budget of 25 platinum ie 2500 gold ..... plus 300 gold reserve fund he was extremely confident about spending gold like water in the auction .
MMORPG : Rebirth Of The Strongest Guild Master
Games · Raj_Shah_7152
*Receiving
It’s been a long time since my college biology, biochem, and various chemistry classes, but not long enough for my brain not to be screaming in agony during this chapter. “Not how it works” is a kind way of putting it. I wish the author had simply gone with something along the lines of “dosage is everything in biology” as nearly anything essential to our biology can be devastatingly bad when significantly too high or too low. This attempt at using “science” to explain the universe’s magic system just hurts to read in so many different ways. I guess on the bright side, it isn’t as eye roll inducing as a new moon overhead at midnight or similar such errors in basic planetary systems as I have often seen. At least here I can console myself with the notion that maybe the author intends the instructor to be an idiot in science or intentionally using a terribly inaccurate analogy to make a point the students would accept.
The biggest cause of ageing within the body is due to oxidation. Your body undergoes oxidation as it passes with time and this oxidation gives you wrinkles, this oxidation clogs your veins, and this oxidation inches you closer to death.
MMORPG : Rebirth Of The Strongest Vampire God
Games · Raj_Shah_7152
*gold rays *a part
Marius took in the brilliant god rays that beamed through the cracks of a few trees, and even the colorful butterflies and birds that glided with the winds, the fresh air giving him an uplifting feeling, he felt as if this world was apart of him as if this was his authentic home.
Level Up Family
Fantasy · ShadowsFinger
*wily smile At least, I hope that’s what you meant…
When the Mountain Ax Senior said this, he made a willy smile before turning around and walking away at a steady pace, no different from a standard old man hiking through a steep path.
Level Up Family
Fantasy · ShadowsFinger
I think the author meant that William had his turn in the simulator ahead of Vincent and had defeated a fire elementalist. The machine translation here is terrible, though, so all kinds of pronouns and references are messed up. I can only guess from the context.
Although he had good combat experience, his psionic power was exhausted in the end, and he died under the Monster Affinity that William controlled.
Starting With 3 S-Class Talents
Eastern · Heavy Punch Winner
*Goblins (Remove the apostrophe in both cases. The usages are plural, not possessive.)
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Biohuman
Urban · Reiverus
*steed -Stead (rhymes with bed) means a place, office, or locale. Usually used in a construction like, “John’s brother acted in his stead to handle the family business while John was traveling.” -Steed (rhymes with deed) means an animal mount, usually a horse, but sometimes used figuratively for other means of transportation one rides (like a bicycle, motorcycle, etc) And as the previous commenter noted, no apostrophe in “its” as a possessive.
"I told him to not get involved!" Akio screamed. He lifted a girl of Shadows and blasted it in front of him before turning to run back towards Lee Seng. A Direwolf Rider leaped with it's stead, blocking Akio from the rest of the civilians and Lee Seng.
Biohuman
Urban · Reiverus
There should also be a comma after understanding.
The foundation for wielding your power meant having a understanding and since Lee Seng couldn't figure out if someone had a similar or exact power like him, he was stuck with the old fashion way. Lee Seng set the towel on the bench and made his way towards the wooden dummy. He stopped far enough away from the dummy so he could push/pull it.
Biohuman
Urban · Reiverus
*an understanding
The foundation for wielding your power meant having a understanding and since Lee Seng couldn't figure out if someone had a similar or exact power like him, he was stuck with the old fashion way. Lee Seng set the towel on the bench and made his way towards the wooden dummy. He stopped far enough away from the dummy so he could push/pull it.
Biohuman
Urban · Reiverus
Yeah, something got screwed up here. This should be the beginning chapter. An editor really needs to fix the chapter order mistakes.
ch 30 Chapter One - Cold Little Town_1
Kind-hearted Grim Reaper
Fantasy · Tang Jia San Shao
*wife
"Since you recognize him, it seems there is no mistake. Boy, if you surrender peacefully, my husband and I might let you go and taking you into custody could even spare your life. Otherwise, once the fight starts, you will surely be shown no mercy," said the man in the blue robe, skillfully reloading the crossbow and leveling it in front of him.
Demon's Diary
Eastern · Wang Yu
Also, should be a comma after criteria
"So as I was saying, you know how to fight but you lack the experience. Thankfully, there is a way for you to gain the said battle experience quickly. The dungeons. Before you can join the royal guards, I would need you to fulfil some criterion one which is getting a class."
I Became A Zompirewolf
Fantasy · AkshatArpit
*criteria (Criterion is singular. Use of “some” requires the plural.)
"So as I was saying, you know how to fight but you lack the experience. Thankfully, there is a way for you to gain the said battle experience quickly. The dungeons. Before you can join the royal guards, I would need you to fulfil some criterion one which is getting a class."
I Became A Zompirewolf
Fantasy · AkshatArpit
*Disciplinary
"Fine. We'll bring all of them into the Disclipnary committee's chamber."
I Became A Zompirewolf
Fantasy · AkshatArpit
Not even Gaia understands the chapter numbering in this story
010. Imperial Prince is Hunting a Witch -3 (Part One)
Grandson of the Holy Emperor is a Necromancer
Urban · Shadow-kun
This is a completed story, so I feel it needs a new review, even if I have yet to finish it. I intended to avoid spoilers, so this will be light on story specifics. This is partially because I believe other readers deserve a fair warning, so let me start with that. WARNING: If you are thinking of picking up this story because you don’t know what to do with the “contemporary romance” genre fast passes WN throws at you occasionally or because it popped in your daily recommended list to earn you an extra fast pass, you deserve to know that this story may well suck you in far too much to merely consume the genre fast passes. The Blips is a compelling writer of complex and interesting characters and story lines. Better yet, the adult content doesn’t feel forced into the plot, nor is the plot just barely enough to string together smut. More importantly, the author never treats r*pe as anything but evil. The vast majority of characters are shades of gray that range from steel to charcoal, and some might best be described as whatever might be the shade of gray closest to jet black. At the same time, the characters feel authentic. When the author reveals an enemy’s history, personality, and motivations, it’s believable that the characters would think and act step by step along the way, based on their perspective, history, personality, and knowledge (or lack thereof). Even smart people can make rash decisions and be blind to the truth about people close to them. It doesn’t feel like mere plot armor when a smart character does something stupid; it just feel like the realities of complicated, damaged humans responding under stress and emotion. It feels like they all believe they are the hero of their own story, no matter how evil the consequences of their actions may seem to an outside observer. Even the title, which may seem straightforward at first, seems to have many layers the author cleverly plays with again and again. The novel may start a bit slow, but it just keeps getting better and better. Every time I think I’ve figured out where the story is going next, I get some surprise. Even when I do catch some bit of foreshadowing the author slips in, there is always more that makes me eagerly run down fast passes and coins. Yes, this is a novel that is good enough to spend real money on. It can even blow my resolve to ration a pile of coins slowly over time. If I hadn’t run down my recent purchase, I might still be digging into this story further instead of writing a review. If you’re not into face slapping, morally gray characters on all sides, revenge, and a romance that is established early but evolves slowly without being primarily “will they or won’t they?”, then this may not be the story for you. No story will capture everyone. For me, though, the author deserves every penny she gets from the coins I spend and more.
The Villain's Wife
Urban · TheBlips