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I got two reply鈥檚 for you: Yes I like it, although there are quite a bit of paragraphs that I have read that have some mistakes but with some more refinement it can be better. Second: when you have names like that it can confuse your readers as it has done to me because if you have watched shows/movies with the characters like that on it in your mind you will think of that character more often then not, like how one one piece Zoro, it is confusing for me as you even have it as he gets lost easily to so just my suggestion but if you want some names you can go on a name generator and get some from there.[img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it]
"Rimuru, I think you should stop with your jokes now or all of them might team up to beat you up." Gojo made a remark before putting his cotton back inside the ear.
Gene Evolution: Monster Simulator
Fantasy 路 Death_Simulation
Why are there so many names on here that come off of others? Like remuru (j think that鈥檚 how it鈥檚 spelled) and zoro
"Rimuru, I think you should stop with your jokes now or all of them might team up to beat you up." Gojo made a remark before putting his cotton back inside the ear.
Gene Evolution: Monster Simulator
Fantasy 路 Death_Simulation
Hi
"Sigh... So hungry." Shiro complained as he rubbed his stomach. He suddenly felt a chill as he reflexively exhaled a frosty breath.聽
My Pirate System: The God Killer Series
Fantasy 路 1st_Manga_KING
Fr
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Criminal X : Epitome Of Evil
Fantasy 路 KhyaaL
Need that stuff for school lol
On the boy's forehead, a five-colored magic circle was embedded absorbing all the magical knowledge the library has.
I created my own system
Fantasy 路 LAZYHEAD
Over 2 years as I had a account but I couldn鈥檛 get into it anymore
<Just concentrate on the knowledge you gained after becoming a God.>
Reborn as a GOD
Fantasy 路 Immortal_Simo
Not no more lol
<Just concentrate on the knowledge you gained after becoming a God.>
Reborn as a GOD
Fantasy 路 Immortal_Simo
Why tf is it a she Chang it back to a he
Feng Jiu picked up the teacup, gulped it down, and coldly stared at Duge. Now that she had regained her freedom, she no longer felt the previous impulse to attack.
Apocalypse: I Have One More Keyword Than Others
Sci-fi 路 Cotton Jacket Guard
*does
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Criminal X : Epitome Of Evil
Fantasy 路 KhyaaL
Bro either has a long life, really skilled and decisive, or the flash, ect lol bro is good at what he fors
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Criminal X : Epitome Of Evil
Fantasy 路 KhyaaL
That鈥檚 a twist
"My name is Ryod. Ryod Dutchman!!"
My Zombie System In The Apocalypse World
Fantasy 路 FantasyLord
Didn鈥檛 need to add this as it is just cringy
"ASTA LAVISTA! BABY!"
My Zombie System In The Apocalypse World
Fantasy 路 FantasyLord
lol he has low intelligence
Kilr felt a weight drop on his head and glanced around to see everyone rolling on the ground. It was hard to get his thoughts collected but something pulled him. A rotten stench leaving a trail of black, he followed it and jerked out of the way just before the gym lord smashed his head in.
My Zombie System In The Apocalypse World
Fantasy 路 FantasyLord
That鈥檚 enough
Realizing that he had no other trick up his sleeves he attacked with his mind set to kill. He eyed the two female zombies coming for him and jumped forward. Their huge breasts bounced in the air as they approached him, that did not shake his resolve one bit. Kilr ran his elbow into the jaw of the first sending her sprawling to the ground, her skirt blew open to reveal her pink panties with strawberries designs.
My Zombie System In The Apocalypse World
Fantasy 路 FantasyLord
*how
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My Zombie System In The Apocalypse World
Fantasy 路 FantasyLord
The tribe was defeated, the chief was killed in battle, young men were slaughtered, old men and children were made into laborers, women were captured to serve as slaves, and to become machines for giving birth.
Rebirth as a Willow Tree, building the strongest tribe in all of eternity
Eastern 路 Stir-fried pumpkin with northern melon
Instead of having it 5 for 1 upgrade you should just turn it into 1 but that鈥檚 just my own opinion
When he saw that 5 points turned (F-) to (F), he added another 5 points to strength, making it (F+)聽
Villain: Ultimate Mutation System in the Alternate World
Urban 路 InnocentFox
I know it鈥檚 a little long but you鈥檒l understand when you read it
"Rimuru, I think you should stop with your jokes now or all of them might team up to beat you up." Gojo made a remark before putting his cotton back inside the ear.
Gene Evolution: Monster Simulator
Fantasy 路 Death_Simulation