BoredMansDream

I normally really appreciate reviews likw this as they give me knowledge to improve, but there are a few problems. 1, you complain about the MC swearing too much, even though he swears a normal amount except for the very beginning, where he is literally in a car crash. You panic. That is normal. This piece of criticism is useless, especially as it relates to your own personal opinion. 2, ‘Slice of Life is synonomous with boring.’ My guy, it has the slice of life tag and YOU chose to click on it. How is that my problem? Useless advice. 3, ‘fourth wall breaking isn’t funny and breaks immersion’. My MC has broken the fourth wall a total of three times at most and none of them have ever been complained about breaking immersion. You are the only person to complain about it and considering the previous advice, it is likely useless as well and you are likely the only person who finds the fourth wall breaking a problem. 4, you say that I fail to introduce how the economy and the world works while the MC is trying to get his life together. Tell me, is your first priority when you moved out of your parents basement to look at what computer stores are in the area or was your first focus to get a house and a job? The world has barely been introduced, yes, but it is a slice of life and there is plenty of time to introduce what is necessary. As such, this piece of advice is useless I think that the reader fails to maintain a reasonable review, as I have proven his every complaint irrelevant. Thank you. Have a good day