Moments 4
1yr
Commented listen to her dude, i don't think mixing alien blood with human blood is smart
"I can't! It could kill her!" the woman balked. Her southwestern accent came across clearly in her agitation.
Divine Charity
Sci-fi · JAPrice
1yr
Commented lol. i picture him being so irate right now lol
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Divine Charity
Sci-fi · JAPrice
1yr
Commented lol. I'd be worried about that ice cream too baby girl[img=recommend]
Lena clipped her seatbelt into place as a figure in the distance caught her attention. The man stood maybe fifty meters away, but she recognized him instantly. Heartbeat accelerating, Lena kept her eyes on him as she revved the engine. "You've never even met your aunt Lindsay. What if she doesn't give you ice cream?"
Divine Charity
Sci-fi · JAPrice
So far so good. I did notice some paragraph spacing issues, but I think that has more to do with the app than the writer. These apps can wreak havoc on formatting. The characters are likeable so far and the author does a good job of slowly feeding you info rather than info dumping. I'm liking the biblical undertones too. I'm not sure but I think this is turning into an angel falls for human type book. Pretty cool. I like it.
Divine Charity
Sci-fi · JAPrice