semmuad

semmuad

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semmuad
1 years ago
Posted

The sage has it all. Impressive foreshadowing. Great outline. Perfect storyline. Loved it. Keep updating the novel more frequently, Ash. I look forward to it.

semmuad
semmuad
1 years ago
Posted

Noiceee...Its a good read. The entire system at once concept is great. Keep updating soo I can keep reading. The world building is also perfectly planned and executed.

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semmuad
1 years ago
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semmuad
1 years ago
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Ohh yeah now thats a perfect waifu...!!!

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semmuad
1 years ago
Replied to Daoist490051

Yes its pretty great

semmuad
semmuad
1 years ago
Posted

Its great just that the writing quality needs improvement. The character's thought are overflowing from his mouth. Its confusing to see whether the character is speaking or thinking.

semmuad
semmuad
1 years ago
Posted

Its great, but the writing quality is a bit poor. The plot of the novel is actually confusing and nonexistent. Add the harem tag too. It has multiple females till date. Look into it. I hope u improve.

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semmuad
1 years ago
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semmuad
1 years ago
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Noice ly Written.

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semmuad
1 years ago
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Its a good read, just that you need a content editor. The text needs to be refined. But keep it up. I love system based novels. Write more and I'll support.