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He acts like a child, so immature. Man up, dude. It's almost painful to watch

How come nobody suspects hime to be Joker? Just by his bodyposture, stature, movements and especially his voice Alea or her Grandpa should suspect this option by now!

Their interaction is so childish, immature and petty. Srsly the dialogue sucks

Sometimes like here the story gets a bit more interesting. Overall it has too little tension

As others have sad this fight is super unconvincing. Such a level difference shouldn't be overcome by a mere smoke bomb and an E level skill. This makes me loose my excitment for future fight scenes

The equation in a warm area (50 C to 40 C while bringing the surrounding area to 30 C) does not seem to make sense, does it?

Why would a panther go for an arm instead of the neck? Unrealistic. Still a fun read overall.

The great storyline makes for a fun and exciting read. I wish the writing style would be better though. Sometimes sentences are repetitive, sometimes the inner monologue is too descriptive. Often the connection from sentence to sentence feels unnatural. As for now it is primarily the exciting story which keeps the reader hooked.

I am just amazed with how well written this romance part is! ... hope we see something similar with Neph or someone else in shadow slave! :))

So well written, capturing the sadness, hollowness, loneliness.

It's such a great novel! So, so well written. I read shadow slave before, and now I found this gem. To me, it is kind of sad that you dropped/finished this one. I guess the reason why it was not as successfull is about marketing and luck, and maybe also genre. E. g. the frontpicture of the novel is not really so great in my opinion. However, one thing is amazing, and that is your writing style. You depict characters very well, and the dialogues are really exceptional. While shadow slave is more webnovel-style, this novel here is a thing that could find a publisher for a standard print book. I really hope you have success with your future writing and continue your journey as a novelist.