DaoistKy4CgX_ver2 - Profile

PS your novel is already so amazing, it's just like an unpolished gem you just need to remove the small Imperfections to truly create a good novel.

Damn, Author somehow reached 15 chapters so fast!!? Sigh Fine A deal is a deal here's a review. Writing Quality (Four Stars) "The grammar is decent, however there's small grammar mistakes cluttered in some chapters, but it's mostly just using wrong tenses and spelling. But please don't overlook this author just like my English teacher once said: A small mistake will become serious if not Fixed." Story Development (Four stars) " The Story's premise is pretty cliche, however I believe that the execution is more important, and currently your doing a pretty good job. The Prologue's Quality Was also So Amazing Unfortunately There's also slight flaws because of this.. I've seen So many Authors prioritize the Prologue so much to the point the chapters following it takes a dive in quality, however it still can be fixed since this novel is pretty new. Here's some things you need to fix Ps Spoiler warning You need to add more depth and info to the story, Like when you made the Mc choose a unique skill. You can make the readers immersed by showing the other choices like the other skills could be a defense, offense, healing, poisoning etc .. Skills." Character Design (4 stars) " The mc seems to be a cliche cool mc. PS author pls make him do believable and have at least common sense (just opposite to the stereotypical Chinese Mc) " Updating Stability (4 stars) " Author you need to slowdown... I understand you mass releasing for the first few weeks.. But if you keep doing this the quality of the novel will worsen along with your time and mental health. You might even suffer a burnout and further hurt your novel. I suggest after this mass release you can adjust your schedule to posting chapters one or twice a week. And the last category.. Seriously this is so long.. World Background (4 stars) "I want To raise this higher but I can't... Author your background is interesting but your just not adding more info or supporting details..." Ps My Main Tips are just fix the grammar mistakes, you can easily fix it with some free apps. And just slow down on posting and add more detailed chapters