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I left a review cause this person came to a discord server unrelated to destiny and asked for reviews, I don't play destiny, I don't know nothing about it. It was advertised as a book and asked for critique *shrug*

I didn't say that there wasn't enough dialogue, just that what there was, wasn't very fleshed out. A character who cannot communicate well verbally is fine, it can be part of the characterisation, but that does not feel the case here. Also, yes the writing has some terms that are from the Destiny setting, but that is not very well explored; it is something that is taken for granted.

There isn't much of a plot to speak of right now. The dialogue is very bare bones, and offers very little in terms of character development or even characterisation. The prose is simple, and reads fluidly enough but doesn't really hold attention very well. The chapters are very short, and you could cut most of them and still have the same things happen. It could use some more actual description, and maybe more interaction with the outside world. Right now it just reads like disjointed diary entries. If I wasn't told this was set in the destiny setting, very little would have pointed to it.