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hm, the story line is quite good but, writer, can you make the plot go slower because in my opinion you are too hasty when making it because if you rush too much then the story won't be enjoyable to read, a little suggestion: pss no suggestions the story is good and enough keep developing new ideas and make your novel more exciting and don't drop this story, which I have said to many writers such as the author of several DXD stories which are quite good, the author of Mushoku Tensei and several other good writers who for some reason dropped their works which were quite good. I hope you're not a writer who drops his work,

I hope the MC is not wood, because if the MC is wood then it is a rotten MC, well you know he is stupid enough and or he is really stupid to realize that, hello there are three girls who like him but he still doesn't realize ahhhhh, never mind, writer I ask that MC is not a stupid person and once again I hope he is not wood because I hate wood, because wood will not realize that they are being cheated on and will even take responsibility for raising the baby even though they only "played" once, you know what that means, don't you?

Not bad

Not bad chapters

Hmm, 🧐 the storyline is not bad and for your story it is not bad, keep developing new ideas and keep the enthusiasm to keep updating keep it up and don't drop this story, I hope you are healthy and can keep updating, bye

no matter what happens he does what he wants well that's what I like about your novel A sick MC who tries to be sicker I like it when you almost capture the big picture of a mentally ill person, I hope you are healthy and can always update new chapters, bye author

The storyline is quite good to follow and a few suggestions for MCs who have a manipulative, possessive and evil nature, and are a little power hungry because MCs like that will be better

I smell the signs that you want to immediately end the story in the world of Harry Potter and I think it will happen in 20 chapters, maybe more than that. Or less, I don't know, only you know, but if my guess is right and you want to end it, then make it the end An epic story is not a story where the MC gets old and all his harem dies or like some novels where the MC suddenly leaves his world because the MC's power exceeds that world and his world is destroyed and all his harem dies, or some other trashy story ending, yeah once again I hope you are healthy and keep updating ok 👌 bye

Hmm 🧐 not Bad storyline, next

Hahaha Gwen back

not bad, but the author can you make the MC darker and more manipulative and a little suggestion you can make the MC optimize all the opportunities in the world because well "the original protagonist is gone" okay bye

not bad, but the author can you make the MC darker and more manipulative and a little suggestion you can make the MC optimize all the opportunities that exist in the DC world or the world he will come to in the future instead of making him look like someone who is in heat all the time that would be better, and MC is a bad bastard who can't even take care of more than one girlfriend properly because of his passion

Not bad

Hmm 🤔

Hahahahahah 'broken" hah ,not bad storyline dude

Hahahaha 😂🤣 yandere mother I like this