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original novel link?

hello author you're english and writing are really good and i don't mean to be rude but i would like it if you would read my comments and suggestions🤗first off you made the MC have uchiha and uzumaki blood which means high level chakra even if he is a weak uzumaki second all uchihas have fire and yin affinity(yin bc of sharingan) and all uzumaki(and senju as they are same lineage) even weakest have yang affinity and even uzumaki can have wood release theoretically as naruto had ashura's chakra despite not being senju so there are many route for MC to become strong during the academy arc and lastly he's sharingan should have been unlocked by now even if only 1 tomoe due to high level training, chakra and emotionwell that's all i got to say but if you're interested in my suggestions you can add like he 'awaken' his uzumaki bloodline to get chakra and affinity same for uchiha bloodline and for the reward of choosing affinity you could add space affinity there and also for rewards later on you could add purifying his bloodline little by little depending on quests etc to awaken Rinnegan or wood release or uzumaki bloodline limits etc till he becomes a pure blooded uchiha and uzumaki 🙂🙂🙂

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but thanks anyway 😚

lemons but separate it from the chapter