deon hart.
Great story. The start was a bit boring since there was a ton of information. It ’s a typical dungeon story. Not a lot of tension going on. I feel like the characters are stronger than their rank. Kind of hoping for more character development. Can’t really understand what the plot is supposed to be. There isn’t really a problem in the early chapters. Please focus on the mc more. It’s great that you are writing about the side characters instead of soley focusing on the mc, but I think there should be a balance. I hope this can count as constructive criticism. ^^
Fantasy · False_Architect
Amazing world building, story has one similar to Omniscient Reader’s Viewpoint in a way. Was able to make me cry three times. Excellent character development and plot. Though the mc has been given lots of knowledge in his last life, he is smart. Builds lots of tension, leaving me to want more. One of my favourites among novels. Read it in three days, was very into it.
Realistic · OmnipresenceBeing
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Webnovel 
Great story. The start was a bit boring since there was a ton of information. It ’s a typical dungeon story. Not a lot of tension going on. I feel like the characters are stronger than their rank. Kind of hoping for more character development. Can’t really understand what the plot is supposed to be. There isn’t really a problem in the early chapters. Please focus on the mc more. It’s great that you are writing about the side characters instead of soley focusing on the mc, but I think there should be a balance. I hope this can count as constructive criticism. ^^
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Fantasy · False_Architect