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Even though I'm late to the party, I'll Put what thoughts I can on the matter down here plain and simple. You've Written Adam out way to inconsistently character wise. If you made up your mind between him being a reasonable human being and a wannabe Kenpachi it wouldn't come off so bad. People dont want a Mary Sue, as in the Grand Scheme of things, Jellial and the Tower of Heaven dont matter in the slightest. And that makes this whole convoluted plot not matter. Adam had no issues slaughtering anyone and everyone involved in Tower, but suddenly when you get to the root causes he's suddenly merciful. Gives that annoying Cannon Preservation feeling. Sure you can make the claim that he's becoming more adjusted and mellowed with time. But that does not change the fact THAT HE KNEW ABOUT JELLIAL AND ULTEAR THE ENTIRE TIME. He Could have stopped this plot years ago when he had enough power to beat Ultear. That inconsistency is why people are so annoyed reading right now.
Honestly, I'm this close of just giving up. Every time I try to improve my writing, and make my MCs more human, all I get is this.
Fairy Tail: Shinigami
Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER
there actually is one over on ff, been a few years
I had come to the resort to make sure my sweet Gray didn't fall in love with anyone else, and if he did, to make sure I killed whoever he fell in love with.
Fairy Tail: Shinigami
Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER
*Bonk*
"Well, my annoying little friend, you'll always have me," I replied, making it sound as if her presence was nothing but a thorn in my side.
Fairy Tail: Shinigami
Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER
My first thought as well lol
"As much as I would love to have a budget-breaking fight with you, let's end this quickly," The mortal said, his voice strained with clear pain.
Fairy Tail: Shinigami
Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER
I get that reference !
"Cosmic Cleanse," I muttered, unleashing an arc of energy with a hum that glowed with a blinding light before engulfing the entire area. Engulfing the foliage around and reducing it to cinders. disintegrating everything as the wave of energy rippled out.
Fairy Tail: Shinigami
Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER
I see no plot but the Ara ara energy tells me she's carrying a story around
For now, I would simply bide my time and watch as this human continued to grow stronger, to see what he was truly capable of.
Fairy Tail: Shinigami
Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER
This ain't even cringe, it's just sad.
Shaking his head and maintaining a confident smile, Izuku asserted, "I don't go around calling every girl cute, only those I genuinely believe to be charming. I'm willing to withhold such remarks if they make either of you uncomfortable, but I prefer to speak my mind."
BNHA: Singularity
Anime & Comics · Einlion
Eh, doesn't really matter either way, I've stopped reading the story. Giving off way to many early 2000s bad harem vibes for me to keep ignoring. The premise of the story is nice, the actual application has been getting steadily more annoying.
"Daiko knows about you and Vegeta..."
RE: THE LEGEND!
Anime & Comics · Aaron_Chong_6689
What is even the point of this drama? They were married/engaged for 11years, this is just stupid.
"Daiko knows about you and Vegeta..."
RE: THE LEGEND!
Anime & Comics · Aaron_Chong_6689
All the earth saiyans did this as well. Dragon Ball Goku did it all the time
However, Daiko had already adapted to that level of speed, his power growing with his enemy's level of strength and martial prowess. His Saiyan body, although very immature, was craving a fight!
RE: THE LEGEND!
Anime & Comics · Aaron_Chong_6689
While not a bad story, I just can't get behind this constantly analouging speech. Truly does sound like someone named Magnus who is trying to hard to sound smart. Or Neil Tyson Like, I'm literally a genius but I don't go out of my way to show it.
ch 0 1 Chapter 1: The-boy-who-died.
HP: Eagle Soars
Book&Literature · SHEOGORATH
Me who can write left handed, mirrored and backwards
"I'm not a psychopath. You perverted old fart!"
One Piece: The Strange Talent of Cedric Strode
Anime & Comics · Wicked132
IKR! Did the same thing earlier
"I won't give you my body..." The brunette said as she charged me again, repeatedly swinging her knife with surprising speed and precision while going after my Achilles tendon.
One Piece: The Strange Talent of Cedric Strode
Anime & Comics · Wicked132
Always hilarious seeing characters freak out about death and blood. Like yo, People do this as an everyday job.
I realized that I'll never be comfortable doing such a thing, ever, and the revelation created a conflicting swirl of emotions within me, relief at the fact that I wasn't a psychopath, distress as I knew I'd have to do it again, and it will never be easy.
One Piece: The Strange Talent of Cedric Strode
Anime & Comics · Wicked132
The fk did he manage to do that? The logistics of that just hurt me head.
He saw it coming and quickly corrected his posture, stepping aside to dodge my attack, but he didn't account for the attack being a feint, leaving him wide open as I killed the bottle's momentum and cut his Achilles tendon.
One Piece: The Strange Talent of Cedric Strode
Anime & Comics · Wicked132
Baby Zelda ? That's how I met her lol.
It was a girl they'd met on an online game who'd been totally into his pal. An English chick. Good times, good times. The chick totally wanted his buddy and invited them down to meet her, and she even had a cute friend to keep him company if he went along.
Stacking The Deck (Yugioh GX Insert)
Anime & Comics · 0_Jordinio_0
Looking more and more like cultivator trash. Is this going to turn in to one of those fake cultivator stories suddenly? Ones where the established system changes every other chapter until it just becomes Yugioh Duel Island.
In the current world, power and background/backing was all that mattered. It was the same in the academy, strong students preyed on weaker ones and weak students preyed on even weaker ones.
Manaless Mage
Fantasy · Gladstone_
sounds like a Fragarach
Odin's gaze became indifferent. "That is not for me to reveal, otherwise you wouldn't learn a thing, would you? But know this, even though you're stronger than your prey, you will lose your life if you only rely on your power as you have so far. The threads of fate intertwine, and your choices from now on will shape the outcome of your upcoming battle."
Fairy Tail: Shinigami
Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER