V_S_9329

1mth

Commented

That bro is cooked

"And that is why Mithras dies a real man, whereas you get to live on as a bitch." Silent whispers circulated within the crowd.

Netori: Reborn as the Human Aphrodisiac

Fantasy · Demonic_Paradise

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1mth

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I read till chapter 60 or so and I have to say that this story was quite fine in the beginning. The premise as well as the devourer system of Bruce give this novel a lot of potential. Sadly, the writing of this novel ruins it for me. It reads exactly like if one would have asked ChatGPT to write a text for you, especially in the chapters after chap 10. It’s soulless writing. There isn’t much dialogue, just a lot of contemplation and talk about destiny, strength and power. Even something as simple as taking flight would be described as “He spread his colossal wings and ascended into the air, a testament to his strength and resilience, spreading awe among his followers and proving the power and grace which was innate to his predatory and draconian body.” And that’s still very light. The writing hasn’t got any big grammatical mistakes and it uses many flowery, descriptive words for everything, but nonetheless, the writing is horrible. I’d rather read a badly translated Chinese novel than this robotic abomination.

Reborn as a Dragon with Devouring System

Fantasy · Rqmk

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1yr

Commented

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My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.

Fantasy · Victor_Weismann

V_S_9329

1yr

Commented

Please write in one time form, like only past. it’s slightly confusing to read one sentence in past and the next in present, switching the whole time

ch 13 Chapter 13: Ruby Scarlett.

My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.

Fantasy · Victor_Weismann

V_S_9329

1yr

Commented

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UNFORTUNATELY, I had to delete my 'hardest game ever' folder, more than 2 terabytes of videos were deleted, I cried blood when I hit the 'delete' key on my computer, but it's all for the greater good.

My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.

Fantasy · Victor_Weismann

V_S_9329

1yr

Commented

Thats ma man

Asher smiled subtly as he saw Rowena extending her dainty cold hand with black evening gloves. He gently held it as he began to lead her down the platform, much to everyone else's shock.

The Damned Demon

Fantasy · Resurgent

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1yr

Commented

Bro sneakily destroyed her

"Ugh…I am done. You are not good enough as I thought," Asher said in a jaded tone as he got off the bed, making Ceti suddenly open her eyes in disbelief and shock, wondering if she heard it right.

The Damned Demon

Fantasy · Resurgent

V_S_9329

1yr

Commented

oh, so all in all he has gray skin, white long hair and dark yellow eyes. Looking pretty dope in my opinion haha

Still, she was getting a weird vibe from this good-for-nothing, feeling that he was worlds apart after gaining intelligence. His dark yellow eyes didn't seem like that they belonged to a ordinary 19 year old demon. She thought maybe she wasn't used to seeing him like this.