Not much to say really. I enjoy writing action pieces, but I've grown to love complex character development and mature content. As in one who is maturing.
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I don't know if the white lead was meant to be worth more than silver, but I have the privateers dealing with known resources on the trade routes that existed during the Golden Age of Piracy (1690 - 1730). My story does have inaccuracies with its lore/canonical references, but I do intend to rewrite my errors in favor of cleanliness and better story flow.
The fog machines located inside of the bulbous bow of an airship were billowing thickly to shroud the bottom of the barge. Sunlight poured in as velvet curtains were being opened by the coordinated pulling of crystal tilt wands of two gentlemen. The natural light of the morning sun illuminated two large maps of trade routes, loading hubs, resupply locations, and her precious harbor plotted out along the seas. Her mission was fairly simple, but the economic downfall of any lost cargo from the trading fleets required more complex planning this year. The storm ship, MarbleStar, had a mere fifteen days to complete this mission from Quistador Ingagoh. It was going to be one of the largest transports of pure silver and red spices at first sail. Pirates were going to be a major problem, and the marines would be overwhelmed if they were ambushed by more than one pirate captain who might've consumed the elusive devil fruit. The cargo would either be lost to them or to the depths of the sea. Recovery of the cargo would be too difficult at a certain depth, even for her and her crew. The best course of action would be to take out as many pirate ships as possible. For her... she didn't need a full-frontal attack. Just a distraction. The harbor had to be obscured for the coming months for her plans to work, however. A fleet of fifty trading ships from the Red Marquessa would be out to sea.
Anime & Comics · victoriarogue
AYO! 🤣
Mc 'the fuck is this? I look like someone cosplaying Sesshomaru!?! Wait this tail is real! And if I think about how to fight it's like I've been fighting for thousands of years!?! What's more I know everything Sesshomaru knows about demon arts magic and swordsmanship!!! I need something to look at myself with!'
Anime & Comics · Hates_Thanatos
No, he just ages PAINFULLY SLOWLY... 😂 Takahashi never really made the aging process clear for youkai, but your assumption wouldn't be that far off. He'll outlive several generations of humans.
Mc " I wish I could be Sesshomaru guys got it all power looks skills and his weapons are nothing to scoff at but most of all that 100,000 year life span plus the fact that he can actually turn his loved ones into demons just like him giving them a simaler lifespan sine me up! If only it was that simple. Make a wish an….. AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH!!!"
Anime & Comics · Hates_Thanatos
Your welcome. 😁👍 I don't know if this will help, but try to think about what YOU would want to know about your characters. What quirks, beliefs, or nervous habits do your characters have that would pull you in. Looking at things from a reader's perspective often helps gain an exterior eye for what you have. If you have a character that maybe pulls the dry skin off their lips when they're nervous, you can use that to explain what makes them nervous and craft situations where they both enact this behavior and overcome it. Hopefully, that makes sense. I look forward to seeing your improvements in the future.
ch 0 1 The Bookworm's dream
Fantasy · Dianos_Elle
I think your story has potential. The main thing I'm noticing is that it's very "snapshot." It sort of reminds me of the storyboard sessions I used to participate in for comic art class. You state the character's name and basic info just so the team knows what to build on, but that's it. There's no sense of who the character is when it's snapshot writing. It's just one quick event after the other. I think had you expanded on your main character just a tad more, her introduction would have been more effective and gripping. However, if that's not your focus and you prefer to expand on the cultivation aspect and world building, then I would disregard this comment and continue working on what your main focus is going to be. Liu Mei's artwork was very well done, by the way. I love the blue aesthetic! <3
ch 0 1 The Bookworm's dream
Fantasy · Dianos_Elle
Oh, absolutely. Inuyasha doesn't stand a chance against him anymore, but I'll at least give him some credit. The Adamant Barrage technique, if used correctly, can catch Sesshomaru off guard enough to do some damage. It just won't kill him. Inuyasha was able to defeat the dragon that mortally wounded his father, so I imagine he can still damage Sesshomaru in some way. Sesshomaru's only real weakness is an intelligent opponent or strategist, not necessarily someone stronger.
Letting out a settled down sigh, Sesshomaru's eyes and teeth went back to their normal color and size respectively. Lady Meioshi was strong. In conclusion to his tests, she had proven to him that she was no ordinary opponent and that she couldn't be treated as a meek human. He could use a significant amount of power in combat with her. She was an appropriate rival. Now, the question became whether or not he would be of sound mind and let her live after this fiasco. Up until now, Inuyasha was his only rival for his father's sword and he could only manage to catch him by surprise every now and then in order to defeat him. Meioshi stated very clearly that she had no interest in facing the strongest opponent, and those who knew her said she was training to confront only one opponent. Who could that have been? No one knew. Whoever it was, however, had to have been beyond his strength. In that case, he may consider interfering with her training to test his own might.
Anime & Comics · victoriarogue
Is that a good "bruhhhh" or a bad "bruhhhh"? Thank you for your response either way. I appreciate the engagement.
ch 11 The Strongest Opponent final part
Anime & Comics · victoriarogue
This was very sweet. I think you can expand on this, actually. If you go with technicals, Inuyasha would have aged about 50 times, so he'd be 55 if he saw Kagome again in the modern era. While I don't condone age-gap relationships, it would make sense and I can overlook it. Alternatively, you can offer a theory on what happened to the youkai she knew in the feudal era. Everyone would just about be pushing late thirties to early 40s if they lived healthy lives. There's a lot of potential with what you have! But, if you feel this is enough, you did well for an alternative ending.
ch 0 1 CHAPTER 1
Anime & Comics · AnnaPaul999
Sure! I would love to. Thank you for your response. I might not be able to get to it this weekend, but I should have another chapter ready by next week. If you can wait until then, you should have something new waiting for you.
ch 17 Siege the Hive part 3
Hellsing: Virgin Mother of Saints
Anime & Comics · victoriarogue