Why the hell did he not use the new weapon??
ch 58 Echoes of Deception
Fantasy · Adamus_Auguste
Organ stage, no?
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Fantasy · Esenel
Yes, great few chapters author
ch 148 Not Yet
Fantasy · Esenel
Its not edited yet, and it’s basically on every single chapter up to this point
The awful smell of the room woke him up as Zera's eyes narrowed looking at the massive amounts of impurities on his body and the dried blood on his clothes.
Action · Supreme_IQ
Dude, author… not only is it a wrong level, it said that it was already 3x last time when he upgraded it???
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Action · Supreme_IQ
So far I think the story has potential. Advice: 1. Grammar needs a bit of work to be honest, there are a bunch of mistakes that take always from the story. 2. I expected a bit more from the fight in the tutorial, it was a bit… anticlimactic. The way he killed the level 10 goblins was just too bland. That was his first fight in the book; it could have been a bit more grand in my opinion.
ch 10 Chronicle of The Game's World
Games · LittleEmber
But he has no actual eyes?
"Whew...sorry about that. It's been a while since I laughed that much." Uruk apologized after calming down a bit, he was even wiping some tears at the corner of his eyes.
Fantasy · Hateful_Fellow
Si far im very engaged, i really like his talents and the power system seems solid, I’m very glad he doesn’t use a sword as a weapon too, almost every mc does. Just a piece of very subjective advice, but try to make the character unique, don’t make him like 90% mcs that have “all element affinity” and can do everything, i think reading about a character that uses fewer things in clever ways is much more intriguing. Keep it up author!
ch 13 Toilet Paper
Fantasy · Savage_Green97
Author you really need to work on using the correct pronouns, he/she and his/her are always mixed up and this mistakes make the text less engaging
"Afterwards you will have time to get to know each other, first let's go to today's class. Reyna can show you your technique", the same girl from before went to the center of the room. When he got into better lighting, Kayden could see some shades of purple in his hair.
Fantasy · Zetronys
Please don’t give the mc “all elements” it’s boring, an mc that uses one or two in clever ways is much more interesting to read about. Just saying because the story has potential
"Double elemental control?" Neo's jaw dropped in shock.
Fantasy · DivineAquila
Pretty good so far, how come he hasn’t created any techniques based on his experience. Also another thing i think could be improved is the distinction in power levels, making it clearer how powerful each level is and their differences makes the story more immersive. Another thing I will say is that the fact he gets to have 7 helpers (the sins), but they all have to be women is pretty lame honestly, why take a nice concept and turn it into a harem? Lastly, about the legacy and his bloodline. He received a legacy from a warlock but the system seems more like something a demon would make (7 sins) and his bloodline seems to have been absolutely useless so far.
ch 55 The Anger Of The Disgraced Knight
Fantasy · primodial
How does he get the meal plan? Nothing about levels and the shop has been explained and it’s chapter 42… at least a basic explanation would be good
After receiving that, the warden left and Cedric tended to his needs. He ate his breakfast courtesy of the meal plan, bathed himself, and wore a fresh set of clothes he ordered online.
Fantasy · Hateful_Fellow
I don’t get this part, he showed her his face at the auction, and expected her not to know who he was? Doesn’t make any sense
"Layla..." He saw this woman and remembered the night before when she had surprised him negatively by showing an unusual knowledge of him.
Fantasy · RVN_1998
Isn’t he supposed to be stronger than artificial phantoms though? Or is she just on a higher power level? Just curious about how much him being a natural born one matters in terms of his power, or is it more about his potential?
'One out of six, right?' Adam internally muttered as his gaze traveled to Alexia, 'Well, more like one out of five. I can't match her, yet.'
Fantasy · Arlemit
Author just leaving a comment here because I read until this chapter to give the story a chance. I think it’s well written and has a good plot. I just truly hope that Adam will be independent at some point soon, i actually like the characters so far and enjoy him having a team of sorts. But it’s kind of lame to see him being dragged everywhere, it makes it seem as if he doesn’t really have free will, and that’s kind of depressing, no matter how cooperative Julius is. Thanks for the chapter
ch 101 Inferno of Interrogation
I Refused To Be Reincarnated
Fantasy · Adamus_Auguste