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So the pirates have a invisible ship or is it so fast nobody saw it comming? Sneakattacks on see are so unbelivable. Not to mention they were just training and running besides the ship and their quarrel lasted about a minute or two tops. So sensei should have known that something is up.

Aaaannnd i‘m out. Mc‘s growth was way to fast. Brainpowers way to op. Unlikeable mc. The AI does not fit in hp and was created way to fast. Overall his powers are all over the place. This last chapter… idk man what were you thinking? Its just stupid. Why would dumbles let him go after he deleted all memorys of him?

The storry is so stupid an full of plot holes. It realy hurts to read this. First the mc punches ron in the face but they are still friends. (To hug on to the plot) Ok i lived with that. But now telling voldi he knows who he is is so stupid. The consequence would be that he now takes his horcruxes and hides them elsewere. (Gaunt ring) (but i think it will not matter and the storry just goes on like the plot with minor changes) And what happend in the dada exame? Did he (quirrel) just go back to school even when he knows mc could just tell dumbles? Did quirrel just test him and let him go? Then the hole fight in the last chapter was realy bad. Mc has time to pet the unichorn and mount it and voldi just waits. Realy?! Ther is so mutch more that has triggerd me like building a broom just like that. And ah yeah it flys over mach 1. nearly 10 times faster than a nimbus 2000. its just bonkers. 500km/h would have been world changeing. And mutch more that i forgott. Mc is way to overpowerd in an absurd way. Sorry for the rant. But every new chap. triggerd me more and more. 🧨💥

Is it dropped like so many other overlord fic‘s?

So the troll incident at halloween didn‘t happen at all? Is a explanation comming as to why?

Did he free dobby?

I like the story so far. Can you increase the release rate please? The story is just so slow.

Yeah, you lost me here. To op to fast. Is he even human? The spiedy senses on top of his beast shenanigans ar to much. Why even go to hogwarts if he can do all that. And to whoam is he talking to? The reader? Constant breaking of the 4th wall makes it difficult to immers yourself in the story. Not to speak about the constant telling and not showing what is happening makes the story boring. I dont care about the caracter so far. He could die this instant and his sister can take over as mc i would not care.

Yeah to op, to fast for my likeing. It makes all other wizards look like trolls.

Ahh i knew it was comming. I hate this harem s**t, it makes those strong female caracters look so weak and it feels so forced. As if one of his girls would be ok with this. I like your plot/ideas quite a bit. Your romance and caracter development writing could improve a lot. The “fun“ part i won‘t mention.

The only one that comes to mind would be that he sees her transformation into a cat and would know she was the cat that let him pet her. I know he knew from the start but she does not know that. So maybe it should be adresst from her pow? Maybe some blushing or a short comment from her side. Yoruichi is quite straightforward so maybe a teasing comment would fit too.

It makes no sense at all that mc does not know who unohana is/was

Nope nope i‘m out! Sorry i tryed but his constant babeling is just to much. Mc is unlikeable, a moron and overconfidant with a young master complex. Mc constantly cant shut his mouth. Aizen will now instantly he knows he is a traitor because mc will just tell him himself. For f*** sake he lives there for over 22 years allready. Thats longer than he lived in his previous life.

What will happen if he meets aizen?! “oh Aizen nice to meet you, arent you the traitor of gotai 13?“ His blunder are just pathetic at this point. He lived there for over 20 years allready. But yeah i hate the mc anyway i hope he dies and another transmigrator gets his body.

Another chapter with just one conversation?! We will be at chapter 600 until the test ends. Pls more chapters or bigger word count per chapter. It feels realy unsatisfaying to read like this.

So far the story is a bit boring. He just lerns this and that without much effort. If the navy battletactics are this easy to learn most of the other pirates would also be able to learn them. Builds a ship without any knowledge about ship building and so on. He kills one of the guys he interrogates but killing the others will earn him a bad reputation? Who is around to snitch on him? This talk about being a monster is also just cringe. So yeah i hope the story improves a lot in the following chapters.

Ehm wasent Ran 15 when they first met?