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I'm looking forward to it.

As a very calm and collected reviewer I must say, this is one of the worst stories I have read. This feels like a story a little kid would write in Elementary School. To make a story based on something else, you must make the story your own. In this case all you have done is replace characters within the Dragon Ball universe with your own and write the most blandest plots someone could imagine. I advise you to make the story more interesting by adding depth to your characters so they're not as 2 dimensional. I would like to see you grow as an author and keep creating stories. However, if you cannot make any improvements, I'm not very sorry to say that you have no hope in being an author.