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At first I was hooked. I was captivated by your title and synopsis. So far, your definition of the “One Above All” is what helps your story stand out, though from what I heard, there’s already a character that’s named One Above All, if I’m not mistaken. What I like about this story is the power play here, where MC basically puts himself on a pedestal above others, with those others being treated equally (correct me if I’m wrong). Haven’t read all of the story yet, but I suggest more descriptive dialogue on the beginning especially since your starting point will leave a lasting impression. Make every word count. Before writing the backstory, think of certain questions the reader would have in advance, if you know what I mean. By this way, you are trying to get into the perspective of the reader who of course will be full of questions upon reading your novel. Basically if you ask me, a backstory should be able to answer three questions: What was the character’s past like? What made them that way? What is expected of their future? Anyways, here are my two cents. Your novel has potential, though the end goal to me, is quite generic. He plans to create a world where he is superior above all and that it’ inhabitants are all equal without any form of discrimination. This is quite common in post-apocalyptic and sci-fi genres. Overall, I think your concept is badass, and I happen to enjoy concepts that have to do with such. Good luck on your writing journey!

Okay so, I’ve read at least a few chapters of your book and I’ve got to say that I was a bit confused about the first part (the prologue). What exactly was going on in the World? But then, I realized it was just a dream. What I like about this book is that it can be adapted into an anime series, probably with sci-fi elements. The downside is that you’re dumping too much information on the reader terms that they’ll hardly remember. My suggestion is: - Incorporate your info-dumping in a chapter where people are having a conversation about the history of your World. Info dumping kills the mood. I know it’s a hard habit to unlearn, but I prefer seeing their abilities in action rather than having you explain it. Anyhow, I like this story, it’s basically three friends with cute elf ears having a bunch of shenanigans. Not really my type of novel, but as an anime fan I appreciate your use of -sama and -chan. I know you have other books that contain similar lore, and I’d be more than willing to help you on that if you want. Just tag me. Best of luck on your writing journey.

Hi! I just wanted to actually applaud you for writing a book that delves towards one’s wellbeing especially as a novice writer. I am a novice writer myself, if not beginner, and I barely find stories like these to add in my library! It’s glad seeing Webnovel writers becoming more transparent with their books lately, and since Webnovel is a place of fictional stories, seeing this is refreshing! Will definitely add this to my library. Looking forward to hearing about your journey!