Karolina_nadolska

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I really like how you use 1st person in this chapter. Ikke’s story from his own mouth is more convincing. Good job!

ch 38 The plan

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Karolina_nadolska

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Cool chapter - as if you mixed The Godfather with Superman. Can wait for the next chapter!!

ch 35 Awakening

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Karolina_nadolska

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I like how the author plays with different characters. We have manga heroes, Italian mafia (don), and a bit of Star Trek (jumping between planets). It’s cool b/c each character with his universe is very clear in showing us his strengths and weaknesses. I like this collage … very vivid … :-)

ch 30 Rude awakening

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Karolina_nadolska

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Great chapter! Keeps you on the edge of your seat. Wait for the next one.

ch 27 The Chase through the Marsh: A Foul Play

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Karolina_nadolska

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I really like how you write about Ikke’s struggles - with his own limitations as well as with the brutal outside world. Nicely done. Ikke’s changing in a more complex character. It’ exciting to see that!!

That's when he spotted the cliff. Without hesitation, he made a beeline for it, hoping that it would provide him with some sort of escape.