Webnovel Author: Haizao - Novel Collection

Surprisingly, people have reacted with surprise at her description. "A buff bodybuilder elf?! Whaaaaa~t..."

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I prefer a good kir royale. :3

_Elle's story has many strong points. The main character has enough imagination and forbearance to accept her situation quickly, and shows a willingness to both question and use the authority of those around her. World-building wise, there's a lot of groundwork laid and a lot of good potential as of 7 chapters in. The plot seems mostly character driven at this point in the story, and there's a lot of legwork that needs to be done to flesh out the budding relationships that are being presented. I'd certainly like to learn more about what each character has going on that isn't just dealing with each other, but as I recognize, it's still early. Weak points are mostly in the prose, which can be a bit unnecessarily long at times, and the odd errors in word use and punctuation. Overall however it is correct for English and a good editing run should iron out the technical issues.

Reading through the first dozen chapters, I can say for certain that this is an enjoyable, detailed work with passion and a good sense of narrative balance. The characters are well crafted, though I feel that the MC could explore their gender swap a bit more. There's a passage where they say they aren't transgender, and there's a bit of a clunky sidestepping of the issue that occurs via amnesia. That said, gender is a tricky construct, but perhaps there was something to explore there that won't be. The first-person POV with the main character keeps one grounded in their experience, while the third-person POV for side characters allows the writer to provide more information about the world. In terms of technical proficiency, most errors are related to punctuation and clunkiness in conveying a lot of information at once. Breaking up the paragraphs would also be more in line with Webnovel's style, since as of this date a lot of the writing seems more consistent with long-form traditional novels. Having said all this, I definitely recommend this novel if one has the patience for a more traditional style and an appetite for rich detail and character-driven action.