Nathan_Cole_3387 - Profile

It's really good but my only problem is that the romance is rushed a lot. We should've seen more scenes of them hanging out and slowly falling in love. Not only that I feel like Ruby and Aqua accepted him too quickly, especially Ruby. Good story just rushed. 7/10

Another thing I forgot to mention is how the author when use 5 or so paragraphs to explain one thing when you can just use one. That needs to be condensed because I always find myself skipping a bunch of paragraph because it's just a long ass explanation of one topic.

I like it but I do wish there were more good characters. Scarlet sucks so far and is really annoying, I really hope that when eventually she warms up to the MC she actually apologizes for her behavior and I hope the MC doesn't forgive her without a sincere apology cuz that's just simp behavior.

The grammar is really bad. It's also hard to tell who's talking a lot of the times, there needs do be less of those long paragraphs because it makes the dialogue difficult to read. But besides all that I am enjoying it so far and I hope the author continues and improves.

I really like it. The only problem I have is just how little use the system gets so much that it's almost like it's not even there for most of the story. I think it should be used more and use it on practical things like giving the MC a skill or talent like eidetic memory or something (Of course he would have to work for it). It was also a bit too slow paced during the visiting the family arc, but I think it's better now.

I like the concepts but the characters are so boring, their like cardboard cutouts. Besides the dad no one gets any development or have their personality explored. Also there is way too much internal dialogue for the MC. Most of it is just unnecessary and makes it difficult to get invested in anything. There's also the fact that nothing intersting ever happens. It's literally just MC write a book, book does good, MC film a movie, movie does good without any amount of substance. 5/10 Could be much better.

It started off good but quickly got too convoluted with the story. The MC doesn't even really have a goal as to why he's doing the stuff that he's doing. Getting stronger to 'protect his family' is a weak excuse authors use to give a goal to an MC but it doesn't have any substance. He also applies for university but never goes there and yes he probably won't learn anything there at this point, why make it a system quest and waste our time with that whole plot line in the first place?