Badges 7
Moments 8
Laps should be “lap”
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Fantasy · i_want_to_sleep
Iris only has one lap
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Fantasy · i_want_to_sleep
Please correct your use of the word laps…in every case you write laps it should be lap.
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Fantasy · i_want_to_sleep
“Being” is unnecessary in this sentence and makes the reading cumbersome. Please remove it and stop using it.
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Fantasy · i_want_to_sleep
They were last intimate months ago, when Iris had her first heat.
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Fantasy · i_want_to_sleep
The first part of this novel was edited well but unfortunately this is no longer the case. Stop using laps the correct use is lap here and the last 3-4 times the word was used. Laps are what you run on a track. You sit on someone’s lap.
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The Alpha: Claiming His Enemy's Daughter
Fantasy · i_want_to_sleep
You have a extra “at” in here
"That she is!" Aurora answered smiling at brightly at me which I returned it back with a nervous smile of mine.
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Fantasy · DA_Aloera
Of course the King likes magic that’s how he took the throne with Cyan’s help!
The Alpha: Claiming His Enemy's Daughter
Fantasy · i_want_to_sleep