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The only special thing about the mc comes from his system. His personality just seems meh, he is supposed to be smart and low key, but he just comes across as overly cautious and meek to a fault. Idk if it’s just slow build up, but he has been hiding the entire story. The system is what makes the mc do stuff, its what drives the story, without it, the mc would still just be some cowardly hollow following his sister around, if he even became a hollow. All I’m saying is he doesn’t seem to do anything other than what the system tells him, or makes him do. And he doesn’t seem to have any cool/strong/positive qualities that wasn’t given to him by his system. He doesn’t seem to enjoy fighting, he doesn’t seem to want to do anything special? He is just there being strung along by his system and somehow everything just works out? Plot armor shouldn’t be the major reason for his continued survival. The story is good I enjoy reading it, but maybe you could make the mc more of a person, because he seems pretty hollow to me.
ch 105 Unexpected Help
Reborn in bleach as a hollow with a system
Anime & Comics · Prognastat
Stupid.
To avoid the remote chance that Aizen might have investigated the poor human that White killed and managed to remember its name he had convinced the others to act like his name was Jack A. Boreas. Although it was a stretch for Aizen to remember an insignificant human that happened to stumble upon one of his operations around two decades ago he wouldn't put it past him either so he would prefer not to risk it by using his human name with anyone he didn't trust entirely in Las Noches.
Reborn in bleach as a hollow with a system
Anime & Comics · Prognastat
This guy just does what he wants with the story. Boring and totally unnecessary filler.
ch 70 Christmas ’23 Omake – Last Christmas Part 4
Reborn in bleach as a hollow with a system
Anime & Comics · Prognastat
Pls make the mc cooler.
ch 51 Back To Hueco Mundo
Reborn in bleach as a hollow with a system
Anime & Comics · Prognastat
The mc is truly pathetic, I understand his perspective. But if you want people to actually find the mc likable he needs to be less cowardly and more involved with the actual story. Its a Bleach ff.
'Grimmjow Jaegerjaquez and his followers. One of the last things I wanted to run into at this time in Hueco Mundo. Not only is he annoying to deal with himself, he should also be joining Aizen anytime soon now if he isn't already in contact with him. Worse unlike Harribel's little group this is never going to end peacefully with this hothead around.' Hisashi thought to himself hoping to make a quick exit if he could.
Reborn in bleach as a hollow with a system
Anime & Comics · Prognastat
You wrote your biography the wrong place loser.
Wow what an asshat.
I personally am not a fan of your other story, but that’s just me. But I really like this one, it tickles me fancy. So don’t be too let down, as there are a lot of people interested in what new things you write.
(Sorry for the late chap. I've been feeling down and depressed after completing my Head-Patting In Marvel Fic that I couldn't bring myself to do anything.)
Re:life with Karmic Gacha (Modern Family)
TV · Alittlepiggy33
But great ch. good you’re still going strong.
ch 12 12: The Truth of Viltrum
Almost Invincible (Invincible SI)
Anime & Comics · EmmaCruzader
Makes zero sense, any merchant would’ve never refuse to sell something to a shinobi. The interactions between mc and other people are extremely bad and just seems out of place in the Naruto world. Go write a Bleach ff or something seem more up the authors ally, there he can use his modern mindset and total disregard for power scaling or understanding of the abilities used.
The last type, which is the most expensive out of the three, comes in the unique form of a seal. It is a seal matrix inscribed on chakra-infused paper. This compact yet formidable weight adheres directly to the user's skin. But I can't sell this to you."
Naruto: Mixed Heritage(Rewrite)
Anime & Comics · Sidecharacter1
Bro learn English or get a prof reader, this is getting embarrassing.
"I am good Kushina. I see that you are faring well," Hiruzen replied.
Naruto: Mixed Heritage(Rewrite)
Anime & Comics · Sidecharacter1
This story is straight up brain rot, it’s well written enough to come of as decent. But are so inconsistent and full of small weird things that shouldn’t be in the Naruto verse. The author seems to just make his own explanation for jutsu and everything in the story is just right for the mc. So unrealistic, like some Chinese ff was rewritten to better fit in his own weird au Naruto verse.
ch 25 Genin Promotion
Naruto: Mixed Heritage(Rewrite)
Anime & Comics · Sidecharacter1
Nice
ch 93 [93] The Fourth Division
One Piece: Path to Power
Anime & Comics · Paradox_