Unique read and has potential, Li Wei has been soul-swapped with a guy's body in an urban cultivation world. The amazing part was the updates per chapter speed was insane. Has to work on some sentence flow but overall it was good. Keep it up author!
Oh, that explains the confusing use of pronouns. May I suggest kindly that just use their original pronouns? Especially since it was their POV. Deep inside, they still claim themselves as the original right. I'm not familiar with gender swap troupe so I could be wrong. Good luck!
Suggestion: "Her" closest friend, betrayed "her"
But that was before Mei Ling, his closest friend and confidante, had betrayed him in the most profound way possible. Her heart pounded with a mixture of anger and betrayal that matched the city's pulsating energy.
Soulbound Retribution: A Tale of Yin and Yang
Urban · marvel_away
She's a she right? Suggestion: A vibrant young "woman".
From her vantage point, she could see the sprawling streets, the futuristic architecture, and the people who went about their lives, oblivious to the turmoil raging within her. She had once been one of them—a vibrant young man with dreams of success, love, and happiness.
Soulbound Retribution: A Tale of Yin and Yang
Urban · marvel_away
To warm the climate is to not mix hot and cold but solely hot. Suggestion: "As if the devil was playing with hellfire to warm the climate."
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What's a test-free breakfast? I tried googling it but nothing came. Is it just simply free breakfast?
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Fantastic first three chapters! No problem with the flow of the sentences, good job on that! One thing lacking was the depths of emotions. Instead of just saying this character was enthralled by the beauty of this view, how about showing it how? Like he reaches for the sky seemingly bewitched by the grand sky. Something like that, overall. Great work bro :)
Great description, was able to imagine the scene very easily!
Yi Heng's journey began in the shimmering city of Eternaland, where towering spires reached for the virtual sky, and the hum of magic resonated through the streets. In Eternaland's bustling plaza, players from all walks of life mingled, each with their own aspirations and dreams.
Eternal Quest: Chronicles of the Virtual Realm
Games · DirtyXiaoLongBao
Are we practicing the dao of word count here? The previous sentences in the first chapter were repeated here. No biggie tho xD
Within the game, Yi Heng transformed into a Level 1 character, his class still a mystery—his potential, untapped. For in this realm, he was not just another player but "The Key" chosen by the game's enigmatic creators.
Eternal Quest: Chronicles of the Virtual Realm
Games · DirtyXiaoLongBao
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original The Soul Collector Pairs
In a post-apocalyptic Earth. A scientist couple, Mordred and his wife Melantha have been experimenting with souls since the day of its discovery. Before Earth's total demise, with all the knowledge their current world has to offer, they escaped their calamitous place through a soul reincarnation. Cast to the unfamiliar new world, the couple has to find means to survive while possessing the hearts of the savage. From the primitive to the metal-wielding Goblins; magic and spells to fasten their civilization's development; and them collecting souls to surpass their body's limits. How long will it take them to establish their own green-skinned nation from scratch? ------ Author's Note: 1. This is my leisure book where I practice, so there won't be rhymes here. 2. The current update speed is 5 chapters per week. 3. I do not own the book's art cover, it was Googled. All credit goes to the original owner who can contact me in case they would like it to be removed. 4. The main characters were not kind in most circumstances.15 Chs 15 Collections
The book's currently paused and needs a lot of reworking. So you guys might expect some unedited chapters from here on.
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Eastern · TheFilthyRhymer