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wasn't he just trying to get attention with the door thing? I can't tell if he's supposed to be schizophrenic or the novel needs editing. I can't even figure out what to complain about since I can barely keep up with the weird shifts and jumps
The last thing Ethan wanted was to attract attention right now. He needed to find out more about his new life first.
Twilight: Son of Hades
Movies · Toruu
trying to draw attention? so he's an attention seeker and that's why he's been yelling alot?
Finding the correct room, Ethan opened the door slowly, trying to draw attention towards him, and walked in. Inside, he noticed that the boy from the principal's office, Eric, was sitting at one of the desks at the back of the class. Ethan then walked over to one of the only free desks in the classroom, which was near the window and in the first row.
Twilight: Son of Hades
Movies · Toruu
he suddenly swaps from talking like a normal high school boy to either yelling at people or that "excited anime girl" voice and I don't get why. does the author not know how exclamation marks work? he hasn't said anything yet in the novel that should have one
"Thank you, director, have a good day!" The boy replied.
Twilight: Son of Hades
Movies · Toruu
whys he suddenly yelling?
"Oh, that's neat; thank you!"
Twilight: Son of Hades
Movies · Toruu
ghost rider would solo them even if it might take a while pure numbers could slow him down to a few hours if they use them efficiently since he's not armed very well but he'd never lose.
Volturi has been able to rule the world for thousands of years, yet he remains unaware of what they are capable of. Taking them out can't be easy.
Ghost Rider in Twilight
Movies · Alekzi
a key component of the difference between hulk and rider is that rider was essentially made specifically for reaping whereas hulk is like that as more of a happy accident, who would make a ghost rider that could be killed by just harming his human body? would be a total waste of resources and a major oversight.
Jack waved his hand, ''It's fine.''
Ghost Rider in Twilight
Movies · Alekzi
reaper, or death, she either saw death coming or a reaper coming. this is like saying she saw a boxing puncher or a biking biker, you don't need both and it sounds dumb
She hesitantly turned her head and saw a death reaper coming.
Ghost Rider in Twilight
Movies · Alekzi
wait so he doesn't know about twilight?
'This must be a joke... Maybe it wasn't a dream after all... I am dead?' Jack scratched the back of his head out of frustration; he picked up the BlackBerry phone and sat down on his motorcycle.
Ghost Rider in Twilight
Movies · Alekzi
there is no 17s author, there is 17 or there is 18 or whatever number you're trying to portray, someone in their 40s isn't 40
He saw a handsome young man in his 17s, with stunning black hair and black eyes. He had attractive arched eyebrows with a sharp jawline and a perfect dainty nose.
Ghost Rider in Twilight
Movies · Alekzi
ghost rider is inherently overpowered anyway, I think he can kill every comic book character besides like a super deadpool or something (not entirely sure so let's say it's 50/50 meaning only one character from all of fiction has a 50% chance of surviving)
[Dear Jack Mikaelson. You have been chosen to be my vessel of Vengeance. Your chosen world is Twilight, and you are the Vengeance who will purge the world from evil sinners. Complete your mission, and you may return to your family.
Ghost Rider in Twilight
Movies · Alekzi
I hope he doesn't act like this when he meets people, it'd kinda crap on the whole ghost rider thing if he acts like a grumpy teen
''No... Calm down... This is John's fault... Yeah... I will cut his dick off.'' Jack murmured murderously.
Ghost Rider in Twilight
Movies · Alekzi
ohhhh THE voice, for some reason I thought you meant his voice was gone like he couldn't speak, I assumed he was in rider form and just didn't have a voice
He drove in the road at a speed that would be illegal in every state, but today he couldn't care less. For some reason, the voice was gone, and he had a beautiful motorcycle underneath him.
Ghost Rider in Twilight
Movies · Alekzi
rode, you don't really drive bikes
''Woah!'' Jack stumbled a few times, almost falling down, but shortly afterward, he drove it like a master.
Ghost Rider in Twilight
Movies · Alekzi
"who did i steal this from?" minor translation issue but English can be hard to learn and people are picky even if they don't notice. questions normally start with the subject, "where did he go" "when are they arriving" etc.
''I-It's mine? From who did I steal this?'' Jack scratched the back of his head.
Ghost Rider in Twilight
Movies · Alekzi
this spiderman is probably one of my favourites but I still don't like how "social" he is, it's probably more of a personal preference but it feels like he's just being photoshopped into movie scenes and taking over the conversations which defeats the purpose of a fanfiction. I wish we got to see more "alternate events" rather than just mirrored events with an alternate spiderman, I guess it's more prominent in scenes like this multiverse one where he's literally just standing in old peters shoes and taking his role for the most part but it's still semi prominent elsewhere.
(A/N: You blind fools. My Spider-Man is a perfect god of all Spider-Men. He stands at the peak of all Parker's in existence. Your feeble minds couldn't begin to comprehend his mere presence! Hahahahaha! Cough... Cough... Please excuse my outburst.)
I'm Spider-Man (MCU)
Movies · AlienWarlord
this seems like a clunky way to just tell us they're immortal
The egg was as large as a human head, however, its surface was extremely hard and durable, and no mortal blade could ever dream of piercing it.
What?! Never Seen an Alien Before?
Fantasy · Kira_Kazuto_4040
alright so not earth
[59% of the planet is covered by water, and 41% is mostly land]
What?! Never Seen an Alien Before?
Fantasy · Kira_Kazuto_4040
please man, an editor, even just for a rough once over would do wonders. it pulls us out of the story to have to reread lines a few times trying to decipher what they were meant to say
ch 0 5 Chapter 05 - New Skills
Twilight: Son of Hades
Movies · Toruu