I don't have much to say about the story itself as i haven't really gotten that far, but i still would like to notify you of a mistake you have made: You keep switching between past present and future nouns at the wrong time and even though this next one might be a artistic choice, you make the character's feel out of character without giving context for what or how they changed into who they are now.
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I don't have much to say about the story itself as i haven't really gotten that far, but i still would like to notify you of a mistake you have made: You keep switching between past present and future nouns at the wrong time and even though this next one might be a artistic choice, you make the character's feel out of character without giving context for what or how they changed into who they are now.
RWBY Ruby's Corruption
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