Locke581 - Profile

Dude are you a 15 year old Virgin or what? Why are you continually butchering your own novel. If I was pointing an Uzi at you are you going to use a club instead of the rocket launcher on your back. Well that's what you're doing with your MC. You're ruining a perfectly good idea and theme for what plot holes. As OCD as you are about your flavor text you drop the ball for everything else. Maybe you should stop writing novels and go to work for enix and write flavor text for their video games.

Bro you've just about fucked this novel up you started out strong as hell had me hooked but around chapter 130 you started holding it back and using ability flavor text repeatedly as filler hell I can recite his abilities in my sleep WTF

It's trash MC starts out strong but even before chapter 100 he's turned damn near ful simp I can't even read it anymore for getting pissed off it's like being trolled by a 15yr old Virgin.

Please explain to me WTF is up with all the writers and the creation of dipshit MCs it started out pretty good effectively taking out the hunters chasing crystal but now he's acting like a squeamish pansy ignorant of his succubis thought and trailing behind Monica like a whipped dog in heat WTF.

The 500s are a little disappointing him and the girls continually being separated and being closed off from his domain and the tattoo not working kinda makes it useless just saying

Not bad but definitely not the best. Great idea though as a suggestion I would recommend you read Duel cultivation return of the god of pleasure to gain some ideas on what is lacking not saying it's the best but it will definitely give you some insight that could be a plus for you and your novels progression. Still your story is pretty good the idea is excellent any read the recommendation and you'll understand what I'm saying. Thank you and good luck 🤞

Truly one of if not the best of it's kind. You my author do a beautiful job of creating an entrancing world and an epic protagonist. As an avid reader of novels and an avid listener of audiobooks yours has kept me enthralled my only regret is that there's not 5000 chapters to beng read. Keep it up 👍👍💯

I would love to say I'm excited but with this authors propensity for never completing his work I figure it will end up like the rest unfinished which is unfortunate at least finish the other one or complete something sheesh.