Webnovel Author: DaoistfuvGEp - Fanfic Collection

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very good story writing and i love it . the MC is not too powerfull and smooth story make it more enterrtaing. not booring at all caracter development is also very good. overall it very good novel to read . URGING AUTHOR TO CARRY ON THE STORY. there is no grammer mistakes at all this and good story telling of author make to read it more . VERY ENTERTAINING.

story is good but grammer mistakes cant be handeled . the should have used the ne lie storyline more better way for ex he should have befriended ne lie and his frnds and developing at op lvl side by side of ne lie , the harem thing was really bad he should have only frnded the first girl and had developed a relation in future andwith this we would exprience two couples in the story of MC and nielie . the auther made a mistake by taking nie lie dantian in last he should have comfronted him and then reveling him about the info he know about ne lie past live and then not reveling his system somehow befrending ne lie and so he can get more info from nie lie and get a good frnd circle plz make these changes authur u develop the MC without distoubing the actual storyline use ne lie story but make MC more of a hidden mystry and a powerhouse but by surfing the story line with nelie by the side .