within 6 chapters you removed the sinister six... besides null who will Peter go up against? (that will give spider-man a REAL challenge). how old his felicia (she comes off as a predator). give more details about this Peter's background in the synopsis (had me assuming this was Tobey's spider-man just to then be blindsided that you started describing may as Tom's "hot" aunt). why is he surprised by the second kiss that gwen gave him (when he just got done passionately kissing her)? . . all-in-all your writing isn't bad but maybe writing in a way of a check list with a "attention to detail" mindset. the story has promise (I like that you're combining scenarios from tom,Andrew,Tobey, & games)
also it would have been a comedic moment if they walked out to notice everyone giving them the "I know what you two were just doing look". because they are in an isolated area with no sound protective walls and other living huts close enough to hear every thrust impact and loud moaning that they are clearly doing ...
I'm a little disappointed that the system didn't suggest the healing water technique but if makes sense he would get it this evolution
most definitely more that an hour long for it to be a singular chapter
to be honest I could say I'd like to see a system like this be given to characters like Haku Yuki make even Sasuke Uchiha for shits n giggles
good grammar, good system idea, In my opinion... it was like the system was developing too quickly, like the system was two sided, for example the sims games "but with extra steps". a trap snowball effect.
this is horrible, easily the worst thing I was unfortunate to hear, if you are capable of reporting it to get it taken down please do so
this FanFiction is very well written, it's unfortunate that it has practically been dropped
"I am not a writer, I am placing thumbs-to-text because the idea are in my head. please let me know if you wish to "take the wheel" because I'm a fanfiction "listener"... I'd much rather just listen to "10 hour" Text-to-Speech fanfictions on YouTube
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original Surviving Amongst The Last: Sam Burrell's odyssey
After his death. an African American 'neet' of a gamer; discovers his reawakening into the body of a younger African American boy with a bit of immeasurable mental trauma; and he is originally set to die. His only benefits would be the knowledge of events in the future that leads to his death flags, along with a system. What path is he willing to take in order to survive in the post-apocalyptic game turned reality he has been thrown into; and how long will 'this' Sam Burrell remain amongst 'the last of us'. Note: This is a alternate universe base on my decision to make sam (this story's protagonist) older than in the GAME. TAGS: R+18 (For profanity), System, Weak to Strong, Poor To Rich, Level Up, Kingdom Building, Action, Adventure, Romance, Smart Acting Dumb,Strategic.1 Chs 1 Collections
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Marvel: Impact From The Maelstrom's Web
Transmigrated into the body of Peter Parker (MCU). Naruto Uzumaki Takes on his new life in becoming Marvel's web slinger. Disclaimer: I do NOT own Spider-man. I do NOT own Naruto. the cover is ai generated with a few filters added. if you would like to give me pointers and suggestions... let me now in the comments/reviews. Q&A: 1.) Will I be writing Naruto the same as in cannon? - No. I will keep some of the traits he had like his willingness to help people and do the right thing... maybe even keep his verbal tick but I will not be spamming it like in some fanfictions. This will be the story of Peter Parker as spider-man, taking on the role of the smart scientists/Inventor. And since Peter knows that this world will have trials, his role is to become Overpowered to overcome any outcome. 2.) Will this be a harem? - Not 100% Sure. I know that there is at least one pairing that I have decided on at the creation of this story, but if I do choose to go that path there will only be 3-5. No Massive harems here. 3.) Will there be "lemons" - Yes. And if don't go down the path of the harem then I'll make this happen. Not promising that it will be good... I'll do my best. I don't really know what I'm doing so will try to take this day-by-day, and hopefully I'll create a story that will stick with a few people... even though the beginning looks like its all filler. Update: I've been using a free A.I. to help lengthen the story from my prompted ideas. however it seems to be too guided to hopeful/happy endings... with is nice but spider-man stories aren't as joyous as it wants to guide the story. if I can't give this a finished product, I'll go back and refine the story. Same With some of my other creations12 Chs 284 Collections
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Naruto: I Gained Assistance From A Symbiotic Slime
A symbiote space shuttle that is set to crash land in the universe of Andrew garfield's The Amazing Spider-Man is slightly nudged off course due to a comet's interference, and it just to happened to be sent through a black hole as well.... to eventually land in the elemental nations. Copyright disclaimer: I do not own naruto or spider-man. nor any character or works on and featured in the fan fiction all rights belong to their official creators and studios no copyright infringement intended.6 Chs 67 Collections
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Maelstrom Amongst The Last Of Us
Updates at the bottom. In their transformed states, Naruto and Sasuke clashed with such ferocity that the very fabric of reality seemed to tremble under their might. The collision of Sasuke's Chidori and Naruto's Rasengan created a shockwave that tore through the battlefield, opening a rift in space itself.Desperation fueled Sasuke's actions as he saw an opportunity to grasp power beyond imagination. With a swift kick, he sent Naruto hurtling into the unstable rift, hoping to attain the same eyes as his brother, Itachi. seemingly trapped in another plane of existence. naruto will have to survive and combat against a zombie plague. how long could he last? is there a way for him to return to his home? how much will he have to endure? Author's Note: This is a Naruto X Zombie Game Survival genre. based most of the idea from the last of us and project zomboid - thinking of adding State of decay Q&A: Time/Age? Originally I thought that I specified the time, but It was vague... this story starts during the Sasuke retrieval ark "hoping to attain the same eyes as his brother, Itachi." I thought that I had detailed it to mention the sound 4. he was 12-13 but because of the unstable rift he is now 10 "before his journey started" = an age before he became a ninja. System? I do think that he should have one thing as this is based off of game zombie Apocalypse survival instead of movie and books2 Chs 6 Collections
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Black Clover - Asta: Wielder Of Blacklight! The World Conqueror!
Copyright disclaimer: I do not own Black Clover or Prototype. nor any character or works on and featured in the fan fiction all rights belong to their official creators and studios no copyright infringement intended.0 Chs 2 Collections
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Marvel: The Ultimate Arachnid (Hiatus)
For context: I'll be rewriting/Starting Over This based more off of Spider-Man (PS4 - Insomniac Game) Including Spider-Man: Miles Morales (which should have been titled = Spider-Man: "KID ARACHNID" but that's just MY OPINION) + Spider-Man 2. But I won't return to this for a while... sorry Zoro Copyright disclaimer: I do not own Spider-Man nor any character or works on featured in the fan fiction all rights belong to Marvel Comics and studios no copyright infringement intended. -x-0 Chs 35 Collections
again... I am not saying it's bad. I'm saying it's a bit confusing. if you need help, download the natural reader app, copy & paste your notes onto it and have it read it back to you, it has helped me many times. (you'd be surprised how many times I typed small mistakes or autocorrect chose to be a bastard. it helps to clean up the mistakes) (bootleg grammarly) just now = "it has helped ne many times" fixed ne to me. anyway I hope this helps.
Spider-Man Reborn
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