Webnovel Author: Rotten_CucumberY - Novel&Fanfic Collection

the story have some potential, but I'm sorry author i dont like your writing style. it's not that it was bad but the words that you used it's really feels awkward and strange for me, it's feel like it was written by AI. But i hope the author could still improve himself and try to see what kind of writing style that people like from other novel. good luck author <3

the way you use the words is feel unfamiliar to me. Maybe because English is not my first language so it's feel strange. btw author don't use religion or religious figure on the novel. it's not good and it would only bring controversy.

Hmmm make me remember with Record of Ragnarok and Fate series, but good its's start. you just need to edit some paragraph, so it wouldn't look like an info dump.