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So... it's dropped? Well... good luck to the author. Maybe, you'll show us a new story

The interaction between the two boys has not yet been sufficiently described. I like that they communicate, but neither of them has shown any clear character traits yet (except 'nice boy'). Although... maybe it's because I read one chapter at a time and could have forgotten something. This is not a criticism, we just need more situations where their development would be shown. But it is your task, the author, to find the balance so that the story is not boring, and the characters are described

It's going to be hard to keep the story going when you've made the characters so strong. I really hope that you have enough ideas, talent and patience to develop this story. I was really fascinated by the idea of a character returning to the past, despite the fact that he will not be the main character of the story. Fortunately, you immediately expanded the world and gave hints about the further development of events. However, don't forget that this is still Naruto. It's your writing and your decisions, but I hope to still read a story from the shinobi world

It's incredibly frustrating when your yard/flowers are ruined. And it's even sadder when it happens by accident

nice introduction

It seems to me that it is impossible to "save" them. They are too proud and self-confident. However, there is one way that always unites people and postpones conflicts, giving the opportunity to solve them - an external enemy

Well I already forgot what was in the previous version with more chapters. And it annoys me to see a 5-chapter novel in my library. I would appreciate it if someone could let me know if this work comes to life

Will wait for continue

A lifetime of lies... I wonder how her story will end. Sooner or later, Hinata will have a moral crisis. What does she want, what path did she choose, how to live when your surroundings are used to your masks.

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