Welcome back dude, you still cooking with your story. Be careful to not burned the whole kitchen! Actually... Just burn it down to the ashes!!! I need more chap!! Though if you still need a rest just take it and don't pushed yourself.
His lower eye look like a glasses, that's make him look like a grandpa... Who's like to whistling 😗~
I thought it'll be a special Christmas edition chapter... But it's a new series rising. Well, chapter still a chapter right? I'll read it later ;p
And yeah, dude. You should take a rest. It's almost Christmas, we can wait until new year. Considered it as your vacation Youth is beautiful thing, isn't it👍 -Might Guy
Take a rest, you're not a keyboard warrior without a keyboard :v
I don't want to be mean, but it's truly fucked up. Or maybe just myself that's stupid? So, the MC was supposed to be japanese and with Japanese name "Hiroshi" alright? Yet slowly I felt like it's more to be Chinese, a dragon descendants? 36 ethnic? There's no explanation about it, how he can get dragon bloodline. He said "Oh, in my homeland there's saying we're dragon descendant." And then boom! Suddenly he got a dragon blood when fighting with dvalin. Imagine you're walking and breathing normally and suddenly get a breakthrough obtaining dragon bloodline. I thought for the first I read it, it's good but slowly it's become confusing. MC slowly turning into those Cultivator MC fr. And what's up with klee? Damn, girl become OP without explanation just by receiving invitation? The concept is great, I admit and I can see the storyline clearly but the execution not that good. There's potential for this story if get some revised. Again, sorry if my words sounds mean or that I'm sounds like a damn bastard. I just want to tell you what I thought because I like this story, truly. If not, I won't even bother to write a review.
Guess not working good this week huh? Well take your times, and if you need some encouragement I will give you one.
It'll be a lot to handle I think, definitely you fucked up yourself bruh
I don't know about it, still not sure about the storyline or the context. But I'll give it a try, just... Don't rewrite it again and again. But I believe you can make a good story... Perhaps?
I can fix her(Salem), and eat her up later~ There's a certain appeal in doing so :3
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