The story is great if the author would just get on with it. It’s like he is writing a story for someone who has never read or watched naruto before. It’s a FAN-fiction. As in the person reading is already a fan of the show, there is no reason to go over every little tiny point in character motivations and backstories in exposition form. maybe add some dialogue instead of writing paragraphs upon paragraphs of Wikipedia facts?
Anime & Comics · Hanma_Jack
Sentences run on for far too long. It’s like the writer wants to extend the story at any cost. Otherwise the story is pretty good
Anime & Comics · DragonField
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The story is great if the author would just get on with it. It’s like he is writing a story for someone who has never read or watched naruto before. It’s a FAN-fiction. As in the person reading is already a fan of the show, there is no reason to go over every little tiny point in character motivations and backstories in exposition form. maybe add some dialogue instead of writing paragraphs upon paragraphs of Wikipedia facts?
The Breaking of Fate [High Quality]
Anime & Comics · Hanma_Jack