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well, good thing that I like surprises then!

no, I don't think you did. I just wasn't sure because I imagined the layout a bit weird.

it's a good chapter! I feel like you can use that phobia later on when he escapes (hopefully) for a small conflict. I do ask myself what happened to Bob. maybe we can get a chapter focusing on that also?

I'm kinda confused. was the house modified after he came back or is that just the layout of his house? great chapter though. I like that the information isn't overwhelming but still important for further progress

ohhh a backstory chapter! it's always cool to see one of those!

it's cool how it intervenes with the real world. his new skills are interesting and Kinda give me Goth vibes don't ask me why. it would be cool if he met a person with light affinity and they'd 1. become best friends or 2. hate each other. looking forward to the progressing story

yeah it's alot if information at the same time, so don't worry! a few things probably slipped my mind too

yeah, the helmet that was used to detdetermine his talents

nice chapter! I like the action put into every chapter, even though it could be written a little more connected between each chapter. it also had a few spelling/punctuation errors, but nothing major. also, instead of using ` you could use ' to make words like 'don't' look better. but don't let my critic sound like I didn't like the chapter, I really did enjoy it!

another good chapter! I really enjoy all the detailed explanation on the new things!

interesting chapter! it's nice to see reason when getting these talents, since it's often just 'the strongest to ever exist just because', so it's a nice change of pace. but I think that there are a few grammar errors, so it's best if you read through it again, especially the part where the helmet is described. good work!

well, that was certainly something. it practically took a 180 story wise, but I can't say that I dislike it. this chapter gave a bit of world building and many questions, which are a good thing since it keeps the readers invested. good job! hoping for more updates like these! [img=recommend]

I think it was a really well done chapter. The pacing of the fight was nice, and it was explained why Anthony knew how to wield these weapons. It's an interesting concept that the bear keeps the damage, but it makes sense since it would be more unrealistic if he somehow killed it at the last life because of plot armor or something like that. Keep up the good work! 👍

Good first chapter, hyped to read more!