drunken angel sick of their own skin
2024-01-30 Joined Global
See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola
ch 37 Smile [3]
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Oh, makes sense. I cut myself in front of a teacher so that my parents will notice me. I relate to you my glorious king😈😤✊
'So that my parents for once... would care about me.'
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nga what
'.....I smoked because I wanted cancer.'
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PEAKK
ch 33 Progression Analysis [4]
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ORV reference
My one and only companion.
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tftc
ch 32 Progression Analysis [3]
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thanks for the chapter
ch 31 Progression Analysis [2]
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See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza
ch 0 1 Prologue [1]
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thank you for the chapter
ch 30 Progression Analysis [1]
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Perhaps it is missing the word "time?" Making it, "I don't have time to clean up." It still works, technically but seeing the context, the latter fits more
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Thank you for the chapter
ch 17 Mirror Dimension [2]
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Wonderful pacing
ch 15 The Weakest Black Star [3]
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It's all good. It doesn't make your novel any less of value
ch 11 Vision [1]
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Ah, alright. I'm used to western writing styles so I found it out of place.
ch 11 Vision [1]
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Good chapter.
ch 14 The Weakest Black Star [2]
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Better to use a comma here rather than a period. One shouldn't use a linking verb on the beginning of a sentence.
She shone brightly wherever she went. Was always the spotlight.
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It's rather odd that a lot of paragraphs are barely whole sentences.
ch 11 Vision [1]
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Good Lord. Please fix these weird halts
Closely observing me.
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thanks for the chap
ch 38 Forest [1]
Advent of the Three Calamities
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