Danoceline - Profile

Writing level is very basic, mostly back and forth dialog. Story progression and the dialog are nonsensical; the logic behind what is being said doesn't make sense. Also, it looks like the story has been abandoned.

Overall I enjoyed the story and felt it was worth spending the time reading. I feel that this is an author who has potential and look forward to future works from them. At times, the writing is awkward, and there are sections, especially early in the story, that feel out of place. Some events feel like they are forced and either dont belong or should have flowed differently. The reactions and feelings that several characters have feel wrong for what is going on, like they are dismissing of the events. World-building is definitely not a focus in this story, but there was enough there to understand what was going on and why they were happening.