Jasalyn - Profile

I just wish the story would come to a more resolute ending . It seems like there's so much more. That could have happened in this universe. And we just did a massive timescap at the very end

Scattered incoherent thought processes. Scattered incoherent writing style. Conflicting details given repeatedly regarding the MC. Doesn't always make sense. Bounces around way too much and does not finish complete sentences. It really feels like the author just threw down every idea that came to mind and call it a book instead of organizing, said thoughts into a coherent pattern and timeline.

not a horrible story needs some editing to polish it all up so it flows

fun story wish it was longer though. would have loved more post story story

loved it. so nice how they tied everything together in the end too.