Daoistemf0Nk

16d

Commented

I like the inclusion of the AI in the story. i can't wait to see what it would do in the future

Samuel approached the mountain, circling it once to give his parents a view of the entire base before finally landing in front of the hidden entrance. He transformed back and, quickly put on a new set of clothes. He approached the camouflaged door and stood before it. "RECOGNIZED; SAMUEL GRIFFIN. GOOD MORNIGN AND WELCOME BACK", Lisia's voice rang out suddenly, surprising his parents.

The Dragon Progenitor

Fantasy · DragonKingAbbadon

Daoistemf0Nk

1mth

Commented

Either way is fine as long as it doesn't hinder the story too much

ch 0 8 First Friendships Part Two

The Dragon Progenitor

Fantasy · DragonKingAbbadon

Daoistemf0Nk

1mth

Commented

Great chapter. it like an alternate version of batman. i like it

ch 0 4 Despair

The Dragon Progenitor

Fantasy · DragonKingAbbadon

Daoistemf0Nk

1mth

Commented

this is clearly the start of his villian arc

"No!!" Dr. Michelson shouted faintly as his son fell, face first onto the ground dead. "Shit!", the last man yelled as he also fell to the ground, bleeding but very much alive. The bullet had passed through his chest but nowhere near his heart, though, late treatment could kill him. The scene then grew quiet as sirens could be heard in the distance approaching. "Rebecca! Elijah!" Dr. Michelson shouted in agony as his vision finally darkened.