First I would like to pinpoint some things.
As an avid reader of the site from years, I can see that this chapter felt a bit rushed and the exposition or info dump at once felt a bit weird.
Also you hadn't provided any character design of the characters it gets a bit difficult to visualise things.
Also the start felt a bit abrupt as it started with the mother and child playing hide and seek in a house, we the readers, have no idea about how it looks.
What I meant is you could have prolonged the chapter a bit and it could have been a treat to read or you could have dumped multiple chapters at once to gain more readers in the long run.
Webnovel
First I would like to pinpoint some things. As an avid reader of the site from years, I can see that this chapter felt a bit rushed and the exposition or info dump at once felt a bit weird. Also you hadn't provided any character design of the characters it gets a bit difficult to visualise things. Also the start felt a bit abrupt as it started with the mother and child playing hide and seek in a house, we the readers, have no idea about how it looks. What I meant is you could have prolonged the chapter a bit and it could have been a treat to read or you could have dumped multiple chapters at once to gain more readers in the long run.
Tyranny of the Dark Knight
Fantasy · Arman471