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He talks to her as if she a pet

Again the blunt change of scenery like weren't we fighting a mutant gorilla just a chapter ago 😭

What does she mean by "no more,no less" are we supposed to think she lying 🧐 it's her age

We didn't get a introduction from the author of camillia and her abilities also who's pov are we reading this from because it seems like the author is talking to us instead of us reading a book and even then the author's writing seems like he isn't sure of what he's writing pls work on that

First off don't u think it would have been better to describe the forest and the creatures that situate themselves in the forest in the description of when Adam started walking in the forest if you ever thought of adding that part to see the his pov

We're not told there's a time lapse in the story and we're supposed to automatically know as the readers is one thing wrong and how why is it so shocking for her at the end when she realized what's going on, and we need to also see the relationship between them grow otherwise the readers won't be able to understand whether they're friends or in a romantic relationship

Also how in the world did we get to her in a towel? Then there's the bloodsucking thing out of the blue like can mister sir duplicate his blood cuz that don't make sense

Not to mention mister sir just offered his blood not a minute ago and already got invited for tea in her home for that

They are moving too fast, they just met a minute ago and what happened to the exile science like we just left it hanging, and it's the way he's making comments like that in their first meet as if they're in a cafe instead of in the middle of the woods, and it's the way she randomly lets him in. It's moving too fast,slow things down