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fantastic series, really hope it continues, only issue is the mc species. great story though. i am relatively new to app so don’t know if post can be taken down if required, if author requests this please explain how to do so, thank you. (the below comment is made upon reading the story a while ago while delibrately ignoring the character design to envision my own after reading how the author described it, so comments made on this are highly likely to be incorrect as i can’t accurately recall the authors description of the character at the moment of writing this, i am extremely unlikely to look at responses so please, if your offended don’t bother you’ll just be wasting your time as i both won’t see it and won’t be looking to see it. dear author i apologise in advance wether i am incorrect in the below comments or wether i am correct as i really enjoy your story but have something to request about it changing / updating it ) character has good backstory and development but… why? 3 tails of different kinds!!! and the rest!!! I understand the efforts involved to make a UNIQUE , NON-COPYRIGHTED, species, but please change it as ( in my opinion only and not acounting for anyone else it’s a bit of a horror themed mish mash of randomly selected monsters to create something quickly) it can be improved though if i do say so arrogantly myself ( in my opinion only ) ( may be incorrect ) i understand you probably have more experience than i in character species creation but just some suggestions? 1) symmetry - line of symmetry down the middle unless scar feature emphasised otherwise it mya ( in my oppinion only ) give appearnace of mutant. mutant e.g. super powerful weapon held on 1 side of the body and other side of body is weak at least in contrast to it. 2) don’t overly mutate humans to make characters e.g. werwolf and other mixed together. e.g. don’t make 1st bicep on a characters arm belong to a crabs and rest of arm a velociraptor arm. or in this case don’t make 1st half ears a “”(can’t remeber species) and 2nd half ears a rabbits. no offense but for those unfortunate enough to have [ ( books / comics ) ruined over a certain theme brought up by characters in ( book / comic ) usually denoted by a form of ( not the correct term - trying to avoid the pollitical speak ) “weakness” e.g. shwoing weakness around many or one charcater(s) in a certain theme. shown in certain characters shown via their behaviours, actions, or species - usually symbolised by a “weak prey” species - LIKE RABBITS. - here is where i have another big issue. i understand this does not exist in your book and as i have not mentioned it just blatantly hinted at it, i hope there are no consequences for either of us in this matter but i’d rather you keep these themes out of your book as there’s no necessity for them to be there. 3) when creating a character from earth - usually safest to stick with a human. I understand you need to make a new race, couldn’t get copyrighted and needed something memorable but, if you distort what your readers are anticipating a charcter to look like then it leads to a disliking of the characters species ( in my case only, don’t know of others ) e.g. technology god, although cliche not a bad idea to just go cyborg, and then use augmentations to remove unwanted character features. just a thought that concludes suggestions. Although i have no control over how this story progresses or how you could choose to use the character , wether augment it , reset it to human form or do nothing is only in your hands. No matter what you do with the character, so long as you don’t go too far, i will continue to read this series and I am grateful for the series posted so far ( thank you ) I realise i am in this instance one of hundreds if not thousands, in the unlikely case you see this and are bored enough to read to the end, i hope you take my views on board when progressing with the story. Thank you for all your work, have a good day :) please change the mc features a bit e.g. ditch rabbit features and 3 tails, 1 is enough. this is how i percieve your description of character proably wrong though ( 3 tails chosen at random and bot according to book description, description not valid representation. new note to author please publish image of chracter to comment section as cyborg on book front page is misleading ( in my opinion only and not to be taken seriously ) although please show us what mc looks like as my bad attempt at it is below emjoi’s at top = ear parts emoji’s at bottom = tails 🐰 🐰 🐺 _ 🐺 / - - \ \ /_ / \ <__> / \____/ _______ | | ______ | | | | | | | | | | \\\\ /| |\ //// |_________| 🐈 | __ | 🐓 | | | |🐓🐓 🦫| | | | _|____| |___|_ /_____ | |_____\

this is a great story and I’d love to see another chapter, i will post 1 vote ( gem ) a day until new chapter. Thank you for such a great story and continuing it would be great, thank you. 🦾🤖👍