Hisoka16

Hisoka16

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2024-06-26 Joined Global
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Hisoka16
Hisoka16
12 days ago
Commented

Time for the surprise, I wish he don't hide his power in the future

Hisoka16
Hisoka16
12 days ago
Commented

Oh reincarnation, and book? If it's a magic book like in black clover then that will be really amazing

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Hisoka16
Hisoka16
24 days ago
Posted

A good novel, but not unique, it deserves 4 stars for me

Hisoka16
Hisoka16
Hisoka16
1 years ago
Commented

The events are great, keep going.

Hisoka16
Hisoka16
1 years ago
Commented

Nice chapter, I liked the detailed descriptions, but what I liked most was the dynamic between father and son.

Hisoka16
Hisoka16
1 years ago
Posted

I think I agree with brother The_BestX, I wanted to write a review and I read his review that he just released, and I completely agree with what he said, as the description of the writer is sometimes heavy due to the abundance of description, but his style is good nevertheless, he should just decrease a little of the complex descriptions

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Hisoka16
Hisoka16
1 years ago
Posted

The concept in this novel is unique and truly creative—it's very intriguing. However, I think the author should have, instead of writing four prologues, integrated those events more naturally into the chapters—either through unfolding history, memories, or something similar—instead of presenting them directly as info-dumps. Also, dear author, try to reduce reliance on third-person narration and include more internal thoughts so we can connect with the character and feel their emotions. As it is now, with just narration, there’s not much emotional impact, and it’s also harder to visualize the scenes. So in my personal opinion, the idea behind the novel is brilliant and holds tremendous potential, but it hasn’t been used to its full extent due to what I see as some missteps in execution. I believe you should work on improving those aspects, and then your novel could truly become something great. I hope you take this feedback with an open mind, author—these are just my personal opinions and suggestions for improvement. You’re free to take them or leave them. In the end, I wish you all the best and much success. Good luck!