Ok, I'll fix it
i appricate bluntness
Sure, uh, but the slave had accidentally hurt himself too much, but it was worth it—now he looked really, really pathetic, as if he had just crawled out of a slaughter done by a pack of fiends.
Fantasy · Hien_zado
if can, please, give me a full of feedback. Mc, plot, all things.
Sure, uh, but the slave had accidentally hurt himself too much, but it was worth it—now he looked really, really pathetic, as if he had just crawled out of a slaughter done by a pack of fiends.
Fantasy · Hien_zado
about MC...is he stupid or smart?
Sure, uh, but the slave had accidentally hurt himself too much, but it was worth it—now he looked really, really pathetic, as if he had just crawled out of a slaughter done by a pack of fiends.
Fantasy · Hien_zado
thank bro..now I thoroughly understood my problem.
Sure, uh, but the slave had accidentally hurt himself too much, but it was worth it—now he looked really, really pathetic, as if he had just crawled out of a slaughter done by a pack of fiends.
Fantasy · Hien_zado
it's pretty bad and make me hurt...
However, she didn't hate it...at least, because her curse had helped her, more or less. Most people wanted to avoid her, which really suited an introvert like her. And more importantly, it had an effect—making anyone who saw her face nauseous and vomit. It was a big advantage in a fight that she could exploit… except for that slave.
Fantasy · Hien_zado
Hey, bro I'm needing your feedback..it's seems i realize some reader've figured out my matters....my gramma and it's hard to put in mind
However, she didn't hate it...at least, because her curse had helped her, more or less. Most people wanted to avoid her, which really suited an introvert like her. And more importantly, it had an effect—making anyone who saw her face nauseous and vomit. It was a big advantage in a fight that she could exploit… except for that slave.
Fantasy · Hien_zado
Thank you for feedback
The demon wore a large, eerie armor that fit his frame. Yeah, he was pretty tall, around 2 meters. Even though his true torso was hidden behind the armor, the slave guessed the demon had strong, firm muscles.
Fantasy · Hien_zado
Could you explain it more clearly?...I need it to improve
Sure, uh, but the slave had accidentally hurt himself too much, but it was worth it—now he looked really, really pathetic, as if he had just crawled out of a slaughter done by a pack of fiends.
Fantasy · Hien_zado
thank you
Chaos Point System: I Summon the Supreme Sword Demon
Fantasy · Hien_zado