TheLastMystery

TheLastMystery

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TheLastMystery
TheLastMystery
3 months ago
Replied to BrendaAllen

I've been developing the world of this story for a while now, but I started publishing it on Webnovel recently, about a month ago

TheLastMystery
TheLastMystery
3 months ago
Replied to BrendaAllen

thanks for the feedback and Yes the Gluttony ability and the constant hunger it brings will play a massive role in Kaizen's character development and decision-making in the upcoming arcs

TheLastMystery
TheLastMystery
4 months ago
Replied to Tammy_Battaglia

Hello, I’m really glad you enjoyed the twist To answer ur question I’m heavily influenced by the works of David I try to bring that Lynchian atmosphere into my stories where the mystery isn't just about what happens but how it feels. Thanks for your comment it's really means a lot

TheLastMystery
TheLastMystery
4 months ago
Replied to Ayoub_AH

Thank you so much for the 5 stars and the insightful review! You hit the nail on the head regarding how 'smoothly' things are going. Without spoiling much, let's just say that in this vast multiverse, nothing is a coincidence. The 'meta-narrative' you mentioned is actually a core part of the upcoming mystery. Keep reading, the transition from 'smooth' to 'chaos' is closer than you think! Glad you're enjoying the mystery.

TheLastMystery
TheLastMystery
4 months ago
Replied to Lovelyn_Joanna

Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed the prologue and the beginning. The journey of Simon is just starting, and things are about to get much deeper and darker I hope you enjoy what's coming next!

TheLastMystery
TheLastMystery
5 months ago
Replied to Zarchg

No thanks I'm growing organically I appreciate Though

TheLastMystery
TheLastMystery
5 months ago
Replied to Solex_Dave

No thanks I'm growing organically I appreciate it Though

TheLastMystery
TheLastMystery
5 months ago
Replied to jessica_Yah

No thanks, I'm focusing on organic growth right now. I appreciate the offer though

TheLastMystery
TheLastMystery
5 months ago
Replied to Lobna_N

Thanks for the review! I'm glad Óengus caught your attention, though he's actually a side character who just appeared in the recent chapters. The real journey is still centered around Simon Eisenhart , and there is much more to come. Glad you liked the dark vibes!

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TheLastMystery
TheLastMystery
5 months ago
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I’ve finished reading your novel and I must say, it’s a distinct piece of literature, even with its minor flaws you have a solid raw story and a very vivid imagination The concepts and the system you’ve introduced are excellent they aren't overly complicated, making them easy to digest yet highly effective. It’s clear you have a good grasp of your world-building ​However tbh there is always room for improvement For instance while some characters are well-developed others feel a bit like 'ready-made templates The same goes for some events this isn't necessarily a bad thing if you know exactly which audience you are targeting, but it's something to keep in mind. ​Regarding the prose your narrative style is simple and smooth which works well for a WebNovel But if you want to take it to the next level I suggest focusing more on 'Showing, not Telling.' Instead of saying a character is 'angry,' describe their physical reaction like a clenched jaw or grinding teeth. Also sometimes you provide too much detail trust your readers a bit more they are smart enough to fill in the blanks. ​Overall a very promising work! Keep going