Justl_B

I really like the development of your writing quality, its gotten way better since your first shot at it, but I think that the "paragraphs" are way too uneven in length. While some are just 1 sentence, some are like 8 sentences at once, which can break the reading flow. The thoughts of the characters in brackets also sometimes confuses me, I would prefer a different font for them, but thats probably moreso the fault of the website. The main characters, Luna and Reno are fun and their interactions can be pretty funny, but many other characters fall flat and are one dimensional, often unnamed. I would prefer some deeper descriptions of the characters, mostly their appearence. The world itself is pretty solid, but its nothing special yet. I personally really like the, sometimes pretty on the nose, humor. The sarcasm isnt agressive or extreme and is nicely balanced with the serious elements of the story, so it doesnt feel like a completly unserious story. I am not even a tenth into it, but I am hooked and gonna continue reading it!