not a bad chapter good job man
so basically what you're saying is that you're only doing this for the money because if it were me and if my book did not pick up I would still write cuz I interested in my own story you're just doing it for the money how could you
in my eyes if you're going to advertise your main character as ruthless there should be no romance he should be ruthless to everyone and anyone no exceptions his heart should not soften to feelings such as romance if there are any female leads they should be used as tools and nothing else romance is just something that's keeping the main character back from being as ruthless as possible romance is holding him back romance is useless
did you spell dangerous wrong I think you did here
Because forgetting the reasonis more dangerousthan forgetting the word.
Fantasy · youssef_nasir
well if you're so mad go to actual book then this is webnovel but you're not going to expect an actual book here knowing you up novel publishing formatting that no author has control over then yeah I mean I see you're going from they could just go back and edit the chapters and edit the plot hole this isn't a actual book don't the author doesn't have control over that
bro is worried about his manager fighting him and saying like the story though can't believe I'm doing this to my own story this is insane guys insane
by the way this chapter is mainly a back rooms of a concept and I decided to post this on web novel for fun I should post this on the back rooms wiki but I'm not going to do that and plus why not make this why not make the slaughter caves relevant to the story later on I'll do that don't you worry
why don't you just continue on reading and catch up at 2:00 all the chapters I promise you it gets good just don't read chapter five the problem with chapter 5 is that Lenny a new character in the story there was a little bit of the issue I accidentally not have switched the gender for that character they're going to go back to being the gender that they were before that was just a slip up from one chapter I hope you can you know look past that every other chapter is pretty good though at least from what I know
well it's simply because the reason he can't answer the void anymore is because it comes at random we will explain that later also to answer your other comments his 5-minute life will be significant you'll have to find out later on currently I'm not exploring it right now but I will later and you said that he is happy to be in the void one time but he scared to go and avoid another the reason is cuz he had three years to experience life outside of the void at first he thought it was peaceful but when he had life when he had family he did not want to lose that after all he did not know how good something was simply because he didn't have it now that he has it he does not want to lose it you get what I'm saying and there you go
give me one righteous main character that does not say that can't good story by the way
If he had been just a little stronger, a fraction faster, if he had somehow been better in that crucial moment, perhaps things would have ended differently.
Vampire With A System
Fantasy · YappingDreamer