moonislunae

My review is focused on translation quality and reading experience The novel begins with a genuinely compelling premise and an intriguing concept that quickly draws you in. Unfortunately, the translation quality soon becomes a major barrier to enjoying it. The issues are consistent and increasingly distracting: frequent grammar mistakes, awkward phrasing, inconsistent terminology, pronoun confusion, and sections that read more like rough drafts than a finished translation. At times, I had to re-read sentences multiple times just to infer the intended meaning, which significantly breaks immersion. Formatting issues further weaken the reading experience. Inconsistent paragraph spacing, poorly handled dialogue, and uneven presentation make the text feel rushed and unpolished. Ideally, a translation should be invisible so the story can take center stage but here, the translation instead constantly pulls attention away from it. There are also noticeable instances of missing or heavily condensed content, leading to abrupt narrative jumps and confusion. Combined with the translation problems, this makes the overall reading experience frustrating, despite the underlying potential of the story. I am now working on my own translation of this fanfiction. My version focuses on accuracy, natural flow, proper editing, consistent terminology, and complete coverage of the source material (no skipped chapters). When I release the fanfiction, chapters will be released publicly on a schedule of approximately 2–5 per day, depending on length and editing requirements, with early access available to supporters. If you are looking for a smoother, more polished reading experience that better reflects the original story, and not locked behind a paywall, you are welcome to follow me.