Chapter 17 and Chapter 18 are in the wrong order
Everything is great, but the updates are inconsistent. Sometimes we don't get any updates for an entire month.
Everything is great, but the updates are inconsistent. Sometimes we don't get any updates for an entire month.
The story is really interesting and engaging. I'm looking forward to the rest of it.This is still way too far ahead in the story, but I think that in the future, once he becomes a professional player, he should choose the team that benefits him the most instead of staying with just one team until the end of the story.
The novel has a great story, and the characters are well developed. However, I noticed that some ideas and lines are repeated too often throughout the text. At first, I even thought the system was changing in every chapter, as if it wasn't the same system anymore, but later you fixed that issue, which I really liked. In my opinion, the main character should be a bit more politically not too much, because it could damage his ideals as a character—but when dealing with enemies or people he's meeting for the first time, he shouldn't reveal everything, including his plans, right away. If an alliance is going to happen, it should be built gradually rather than after a single meeting or just one day. I think that would fit the aristocratic and medieval world you've created much better. Of course, this is just my personal opinion. I've never written anything myself, so it's entirely up to you,you're the creator.
The story is progressing really well, and most importantly, the updates are consistent. I also like that it makes me want to learn how the system works. Keep it up!
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Hello, the novel is amazing. Please continue it, and also please explain the power ranking system in the story.
Your story is really good, and you're doing an amazing job. I hope you continue it because I'm looking forward to the next chapters. Keep up the great work
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this novel is good im waiting for another chapter
I think Chapters 17 and 18 may have been uploaded in the wrong order. In Chapter 17, Lisa is introduced as if the readers already know her, even though in the later chapters that's where the protagonist actually meets her for the first time. You might want to take another look at Chapters 17 through 20 to make sure everything is in the correct order. I don't know how you've arranged the story, but I'm pretty sure the chapters were either uploaded incorrectly or accidentally swapped.
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